Mangix Yamada [Captain of division 11] [Waiting for approval ^.^]

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Mangix Yamada [Captain of division 11] [Waiting for approval ^.^]

Post by Mangix on Sun Aug 29, 2010 6:16 pm

Basic Information

Name: Mangix Yamda

Age: 36 (1069)

Gender: Male

Division: Squad 11, offensive tactics

Seat: Captain

Looks:
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Mangix is covered in thick black and white fur. About 7'8 and weighs close to 350 lbs. He is very built for someone like him and is very upper body strong. He wears a old world chinese/japansese gi with white ropes for the buttons and white trim around the ankles and wrist. The trim is made out of a fine silk, both comfortable and soft to the touch, it's almost as if it wasn't even there. Mengix also wears a hat common to a lot of people wore when he was alive. His belt is made out of just a simple rope. Hanging from the belt is a assortment of sake bottles, tea pots, leafs and bags he makes in his own private brewery inside his office. His sword is tied to his waist behind him in fear they would knock off his assorted items tied to his belt if it were tied to the sides or front. Each bottle on his belt has a symbol, there are 4 in all. The symbols spell out Honor, Pride, Strength, and Life. Mangix has labeled these bottles with the symbols to remind him of what he stands for and why he stands for them.

Personality: Mangix is a very laid back guy. The only things he gets up for is to spar, eat, sleep and drink tea, sake, or to do his job. Mangix is extremely lazy when it comes to doing his work, he prefers to get a lower seat to do filing or what ever it is he has to do. Mangix hates cowards, boring fights and people who think less of him because he's a giant panda. Mangix also enjoys spending time with his fellow captains hoping one of them will challenge him to spar in the squad 11 training grounds. Mangix has a great sense of honor and pride when he fights, he believes without honor, one cannot fight, and without pride, one has no reason to fight. Mangix also is very proud of his strength both in and out of battle by being a source of inspiration to his comrades and anyone around him. He can't stand to see people down and depressed, he will always reminds those that one's life can go in many directions, but will always find it's way to the path of righteousness. Mangix is a well in nature, but if there's one thing to be cautious about him, is his anger. When enraged his true spiritual pressure is released causing him to enter a frenzied state where his zanpaktou isn't the only weapon you have to worry about. Mangix tries his very best to keep anger out of his body and soul, he believes having his brewery is the source which keeps his anger under control.


Zanpakuto Information

Zanpakuto Name: Jousei myoushu (brew master)

Zanpakuto Looks:
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Mangix's zanpaktou is carried in a red sheath with a floral designs painted on sheath its self. The top and bottom of the sheath are covered in a onyx jewel trim. The middle of the sheath has a grip made out of a fine cotton, comforting to ones grip. The hilt is red with a ornament made of onyx on bottom of the hilt. The guard of the zanpaktou closely resembles that of a paw print, upon a closer look it looks more like a pandas paw print.


Zanpakuto Description: No powers while in Shikai.

Released Zanpakuto Description: The sword turns into a long very sturdy bamboo staff that can withstand the force from almost any weapon.The joints in the staff have bristles used to cut open the opponents carapace to give the victim intoxication by small hints of sake, the more you get cut, the more intoxicated one gets. The Sheath turns into a heavy keg that weighs close to 100 pounds. The keg carrys sake that when opened releases a thick cloud of the aroma of a rich sake. The aroma can quickly intoxicate one if they don't know how to handle their liquore. The keg can be tied to the end of the staff to be used like a hammer, it can be used to shake the very earth it's self.

Zanpakuto Release Phrase: Intoxicate them, Jousei Myoushu!

Released Zanpakuto Looks:
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Zanpakuto Spirit:
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Zanpakuto Realm:
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Bankai Information

Bankai Name: Yajuu no sono Jousei Myoushu! (Beast of the Brew Master)

Bankai Description: Mangix throws his keg into the air, the contents of the keg begin to expand until it burst spraying a very thick fog of sake all over with in a very large radius. The fog spirals into a tornado in the middle of the area and then burst revealing a large dragon shaped beast made entirely of pure sake. Mangix controls the movement of the dragon with a tether reaching from his staff around the dragons neck. The tether is made from Mangix's spiritual energy enabling him to shorten or lengthen the tether to any length he wants. As the dragon moves it spreads more sake fumes intoxicating all who breath it in. Being made of pure sake it can also take the shape and form of anything it wants. If the dragon is destroyed it can be reformed by the fog turning back into it's liquid form.

Bankai Looks:
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Alterations: The only alteration is Mangix loses his keg and his staff gains a tether made of Mangix's spiritual energy.

Kido:
Hadou
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Name: Shō - Push
Type: Hadou
Number: 1
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Pushes the target away from the caster.

Name: Byakurai - Pale Lightning
Type: Hadou
Number: 4
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Lightning
Description: The user fires a concentrated, powerful lightning bolt from their finger.

Name: Tsuzuri Raiden - Bound Lightning
Type: Hadou
Number: 11
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Lightning
Description: Electric current flows through any object the user touches and is able to lead electricity, damaging any target that is in contact with the object the current runs through.

Name: Shakkahō - Shot of Red Fire
Type: Hadou
Number: 31
Incantation: "Ye lord! Mask of blood and flesh, all creation, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! Inferno and pandemonium, the sea barrier surges, march on to the south!"
Element: Fire
Description: Fires a ball of red energy at a target.

Name: Ōkasen - Yellow Fire Flash
Type: Hadou
Number: 32
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Fire
Description: Fires a wide arc of yellow energy at a target.

Name: Sōkatsui - Blue Fire, Crash Down
Type: Hadou
Number: 33
Incantation: "Ye lord! Mask of flesh and bone, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! Truth and temperance, upon this sinless wall of dreams unleash but slightly the wrath of your claws."
Element: Fire
Description: Fires a burst of blue spiritual energy at a target in a similar manner to #31, but over a wider area and with more power

Name: Kongōbaku - Adamantine Blast
Type: Hadou
Number: 36
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Fire
Description: A blast of spherical, red energy similar in strength to a Sōkatsui blast, but slightly more powerful.

Name: Haien - Abolishing Flames
Type: Hadou
Number: 54
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Fire
Description: Fires a blast of purple spiritual energy that will incinerate a target completely when it makes contact.

Name: Tenran - Orchid Sky
Type: Hadou
Number: 58
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Wind
Description: A widening tornado-like blast is fired towards the target.

Name: Raikōhō - Thunder Roar Cannon
Type: Hadou
Number: 63
Incantation: "Sprinkled on the bones of the beast! Sharp tower, red crystal, steel ring. Move and become the wind, stop and become the calm. The sound of warring spears fills the empty castle!"
Element: Lightning
Description: Fires a massive wave of yellow energy at a target.

Name: Gaki Rekkō - Raging Light Fang
Type: Hadou
Number: 68
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: A spell that makes a circle of energy, before firing blasts of green light from its center in a cage-like formation. This spell is both very powerful, and hard to dodge.

Name: Sōren Sōkatsui - Twin Lotus Blue Fire, Crash Down
Type: Hadou
Number: 73
Incantation: "Ye lord! Mask of blood and flesh, all creation, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! On the wall of blue flame, inscribe a twin lotus. In the abyss of conflagration, wait at the far heavens."
Element: Fire
Description: Essentially a doubled version of #33, this spell fires two shots of blue fire with greater potency than the single-shot variety.

Name: Hiryugekizokushintenraiho - Flying Dragon-Striking Heaven-Shaking Thunder Cannon
Type: Hadou
Number: 88
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Lightning
Description: Fires a gigantic electricity blast of spiritual energy resulting in a truly enormous explosion.
Bakudo
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Name: Sai - Restrain
Type: Bakudo
Number: 1
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Locks a target's arms in place behind their back. Broken rather easily by most creatures with spiritual pressure and awareness.

Name: Hainawa - Crawling Rope
Type: Bakudo
Number: 4
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: An energy rope entangles the target's arms. Easily broken by entities with high spiritual pressure.

Name: Seki - Repulse
Type: Bakudo
Number: 8
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Creates a round shield that seems to temporarily paralyze and repel whatever strikes it.

Name: Geki - Strike
Type: Bakudo
Number: 9
Incantation: "Disintegrate, you black dog of Rondanini!! Look upon yourself with horror and then claw out your own throat!"
Element: N/A
Description: Engulfs the target in red light, completely paralyzing them.

Name: Hourin - Disintegrating Circle
Type: Bakudo
Number: 9
Incantation: "Disintegrate, you black dog of Rondanini!! Look upon yourself with horror and tear out your own throat!"
Element: N/A
Description: Causes an orange hued tendril with spiraling yellow patterns to erupt from the users hand and attempt to trap a target. the end of it remains in the hands of the user allowing them to control the path of the tendril before and after capture. The Kidō is able to connect with another one of itself if both have captured a target and bind them together.

Name: Fushibi - Ambush Flare
Type: Bakudo
Number: 12
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: This spell is used in conjunction with Shakkahō and a Kidō net that has entangled her opponents resulting in a large explosion around them all.

Name: Sekienton - Red Smoke Escape
Type: Bakudo
Number: 21
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Creates a blast upon activation and is used like a ninja's smoke bomb.

Name: Kyokko - Curved Light
Type: Bakudo
Number: 26
Incantation: Unknown
Element: Light
Description: Hides the target from sight, by bending light. The spell has the ability to totally hide the presence and reiatsu of the user or specified object.

Name: Hakufuku - White Crawl
Type: Bakudo
Number: 28
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: This technique muddles the consciousness of its target. The user can use this spell while imprisoned to knock out a guard and destroy everything within a certain radius of herself.

Name: Shitotsu Sansen - Beak-Piercing Triple Beam
Type: Bakudo
Number: 30
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Forming a golden triangle with one's finger, it shoots three beams of light that pin the target to one place on a surface, slamming into his or her body in three places in a shape of an equilateral triangle.

Name: Tsuriboshi - Suspending Star
Type: Bakudo
Number: 37
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Creates a star-shaped cushion of Spiritual Energy, which anchors it to nearby objects with "ropes" of spirit particles. It can stop falling objects, acting like a safety net.

Name: Enkosen - Arc Shield
Type: Bakudo
Number: 39
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Summons a shield of condensed reiatsu to block opponents' attacks.

Name: Kakushitsuijaku - Summoning of the Tracking Sparrows
Type: Bakudo
Number: 58
Incantation: "Heart of the south, eye of the north, finger of the west, foot of the east, arrive with the wind and depart with the rain."
Element: N/A
Description: Tracks and locates any spiritual force the user focuses on. To activate it, the user must draw a circle on the ground, cut into four parts with a specific character in each. The incantation animates the circle, causing various numbers to appear within until the specific set is found. The number set seems to be a variation on longitude and latitude.

Name: Rikujōkōrō - Six Rods Prison of Light
Type: Bakudo
Number: 61
Incantation: "Carriage of Thunder. Bridge of a spinning wheel. With light, divide this into six!"
Element: N/A
Description: Summons six thin, wide beams of light that slam into a target's midsection, holding them in place. The target is then unable to move any part of their body including the parts that were not struck by the beams.

Name: Hyapporankan - Hundred Steps Fence
Type: Bakudo
Number: 62
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: A rod formed of energy is thrown towards the target before it disintegrates into numerous short rods which are used to pin the target to the surroundings and render them immobile.

Name: Sajo Sabaku - Locking Bondage Stripes
Type: Bakudo
Number: 63
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Similar to Bakudō No. 4, but stronger, this spell binds the arms of a target.

Name: Tozanshō - Inverse Mountain Crystal
Type: Bakudo
Number: 73
Incantation: Unknown
Element: N/A
Description: Creates an inverted pyramid-shaped barrier around the caster.

Name: Gochūtekkan - Quintet of 1 kan Iron Pillars
Type: Bakudo
Number: 75
Incantation: "Walls of ironsand, a priestly pagoda, glowing ironclad fireflies. Standing upright, silent to the end."
Element: N/A
Description: Summons five incredibly tall and thick pillars which are connected to each other by chains to pin a target to the ground.

Name: Tenteikūra - Heavenly Rickshaws in Silken Air
Type: Bakudo
Number: 77
Incantation: "Black and white net. Twenty-two bridges, sixty-six crowns and belts. Footprints, distant thunder, sharp peak, engulfing land, hidden in the night, sea of clouds, blue line. Form a circle and fly though the heavens."
Element: N/A
Description: Transmits messages mentally to anyone within an area of the caster's choosing. In addition to reciting the spell, the user must draw specific markings on their arms, which are animated by the spell to convey the messages. The messages can be spoken either by the caster or by another within the vicinity of the caster.



Techniques:

Technique Name: Shunpo (flash step)
Technique Type: Movement
Degree of difficulty: Expert
Description: The technique allows one to travel a great distance in such a small amount of time.

History and RP Sample

History:
~~Life~~
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Mangix was born just a ordinary panda. Mangix lived during the 1500's in china near what was nothing but villages, and towns. Mangix lived his cub life roaming with other panda's and was leading a normal life. Mangix life changed one day when a band of smugglers captured him and the other panda's around him. Mangix was nearly dragged half across china until the reached the beach where the smugglers had a large boat to transport the captured panda's back to there country for trade. Months passed as Mangix and his family and friends were stuck on a ship sailing for the country of japan, most of the panda's died on the way. When they finally reached their country Mangix was the only one left alive from the starvation and corpses around him. They took him off the ship and threw him on a cart tied down as they headed more into the country.

After the constant traveling Mangix was soon bought after he was brought to a large village. Mangix was bought by the leader of the village for entertainment, and as the days passed, the leader got bored with mangix. Mangix was given away to the village chiefs. Mangix was still young and not fully grown so he was about 5 feet high. When the day came for the chiefs to use Mangix in a meat stew he was sprung free by a young street rat from a mountain village named Soto Yamada. Soto had freed Mangix and he was truly grateful, so Mangix decided to follow the young man home back to the mountains and soon become a loved pet of the Yamada family.

The Yamada family was a bit strang, Soto's mother was a priestess, his father a martial artist, his sister a painter, and his brother a writer. Soto wasn't anything special, he felt the only thing special about him was his new furry friend Mangix. Soto and Mangix would do everything together eat, sleep bath, play and even do chores. The days turned into weeks, the weeks turned into months, and months turned into years and soon Soto and Mangix were a old man, and his old panda.

~~Death~~
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As Soto and Mangix grew older in their years they grew wiser. Soto had moved himself and Mangix into a different village and start a new life making tea. Soto was unaware that the village they moved to was supposedly cursed by a demon. Once a week the demon would come and consume souls of priest and priestesses. Soto didn't believe it for a second until in the next few days the rumors he heard had come true, a priest was found dead near the village gates, it was if his soul was torn from his body. Soto was not convinced of that there was such things as demons. The next week there was another incident, a young woman was slaughtered just outside the village, her friend was with her when she had told her to run. The young lady told the villagers she could hear a horrifying howl in the distance as she ran for the village.

More and more people began to be murdered, but it wasn't just priest or priestesses, it was anything that moveing, Woman, children, even animals. Soto was slowly becoming convinced there was such things as demons until one day where he was able to see spirits of the villagers wondering around with chains. Soto wasn't the only one, Mangix also became frightened and started to lash out at other villagers for no reason. Soto and Mangix heard a howl one night when it was raining, then the wall surrounding the village was destroyed, as the dust cleared there appeared a huge manifestation with a white mask and a hole in it's chest. Soto ran for the other side of the village, as he reached the other side more white masked monsters have made they're way through the walls and started to devour people and the spirits around them.

Soto was confronted by one of the monsters and was separated from his body. Soto soul was vulnerable to be eaten by the monster until it met Mangix. Being a panda he was more tuned to some super natural happenings. Mangix sprang into action and tried to defend Soto as much as he could before the beast separated him from his own body. Soto and Mangix were about to die until many strange people carrying swords and dressed in black robes appeared from no where and began to slay the beast one at a time. Mangix continued to fight the beast that tried to devour Soto and eventually was aided by the strange warriors. Mangix was able to cause a huge gash in the beasts face and it slowly retreated back into the shadows. The strange men continued to wonder around the village, approaching the spirits one by one. They would touch their heads with the hilt of their swords and the spirits of the villagers would hold their hands together look into the sky, close their eyes disappear in a bright light and rise up to the heavens. As on approached Soto Mangix jumped in the way and roared at the warrior.

Mangix was quickly surrounded by the warriors and was subdued so they could preform a con-soul on Soto. Mangix became angry as they approached Soto and something strange happened, Mangix broke free using something unexpected, spiritual pressure. The warriors were baffled at first that a animal could possessed spiritual pressure that was that strong. Mangix stood over Soto and continued to not let the warriors past until one of them approached, this one wasn't like the others, he wore a badge around his arm and his sword looked different from the others. The man withdrew his sword and put his hands in the air and slowly approached Mangix addressing him that they meant no harm. Being convinced their intentions meant no harm to him or Soto, Mangix stepped aside as they preformed a Con-soul on Soto as he turned into but a faint light rising to the heavens Mangix sat there in a depression. The man approached Mangix and asked if he could perform a con-soul on him. Mangix just sat there looking into the sky, not moving an inch. The man assured him that if he did a con-soul he would be able to see Soto again, with out question Mangix jumped on the man and licked his face. "Alright, you'll soon see your master on the other side." stamping his head Mangix laid down and soon transformed into the little ball of light just like his master Soto did.

~~Shinigami~~
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After Mangix was sent to the soul society he awoke in a strange place, this place was known as the rukon district. Mangix was confused about where he was or what happened he couldn't remember a thing, as if his entire life was a blank. Mangix wondered around and as he did, he found out something shocking. Mangix just wasn't a regular panda anymore, he was walking on two legs. Running to the closest thing that could reflect a image he was shocked to discover he was an animal. Thinking he would be a outcast from the others in rukon he quickly hid his face in some old rags he found being used as curtains. Mangix then began to roam the streets living the life like anyone else would in rukon, he even some how got a job selling sake.

Mangix worked at a restaurant in rukon for several months until it was visited by shinigami of the thirteen court guard squads. Everyone in the restaurant was cleared out just so the shinigami could eat in peace, Mangix was given a great honor to serve them. As Mangix was serving them, one of them stopped him before he could go back into the kitchen. The man stated "Waiter, could you come here for a moment?" Mangix looked at his boss and his boss just nodded. Mangix approached the shinigami with caution, immediately the shinigami ripped off the rags around his head and knew he had felt a small spiritual pressure that seemed familiar. All the shinigami in the restaurant drew their swords and pointed them towards Mangix. All except one, the one shinigami who did not draw his sword ordered the others to withdraw their blades and head back to the seireitei. The men stormed out and headed back as commander of the group stayed behinde. "What is your name, panda?". Mangix didn't know how to react, so he calmly stated his name and bowed. "Mangix Yamada sir." The shinigami told him to follow him, and so Mangix did.

Mangix was brought to the seireitei and was confronted by many shinigami. Sensing his spiritual pressure the shinigami that brought him there took him to sign up for the shinigami academy. Mangix was shocked to think he could become one of them, but for some reason Mangix had a itching that he had some kind of hidden power. The first day Mangix showed up in the blue and white uniform given to him by the academy and immediately was put in a sparing match to test his ability with a sword. Amazingly Mangix did pretty good even though he lost. Kido classes were difficult on account Mangix had no control of his reiatsu at the time so his kido would either fail horribly fail embarrassing him or causing a massive explosion at the target range. More and more Mangix trained to improve his skills, and his soon his training paid off, Mangix graduated from the academy, still shaky when it came to his kido and was put into squad 13.

Mangix spent a couple years in squad 13 and it went pretty well. Mangix attained his zanpaktou while he was in the academy, its power was strong, and strange enough to help him attain the 3rd seat in Squad 13. Mangix went on many missions strengthening himself and soon was able to take on bigger and more dangerous missions by himself. Mangix was given a big mission, since the lieutenant and captain were on a different mission Mangix was put in charge of leading a squad into the real world to eliminate a horde of menos grande that where being lead by a adjuchus. Mangix accepted the mission and went into the real world. The adjuchus had lead the menos to karakura town to devour souls, but was interrupted by Mangix and his fellow squad members. A large battle broke out, the others in the squad where eliminating the menos one by one. Mangix was left with the adjuchus in a one on one fight. This was the first time Mangix ever fought a adjuchus, as they battled the adjuchus grew stronger ans Mangix grew weaker. Mangix was blasted to the ground blocking a cero, he was near death and felt as he had no more power left he slipped into a dream. Mangix laid there in the dirt, he had simply given up, until he heard something. "Use our power....You have the strength, get up and fight! Use our power to it's full extent, rise Mangix and defend your your comrades in from the enemy, USE OUR POWER!!" Mangix spiritual pressure went through the roof and he stood. Mangix walked towards the Adjuchus his bamboo staff and keg in hand, he tossed the keg into the air and took a stance and said only one thing....."Bankai!"

Mangix returned to seireitei and filled out the reports for the mission he just went on, his squad returned with no casualties and compete elimination of the menos and the adjuchus. After Mangix tunred in his report he was ordered to see the captain commander for something important. Word had reached the captain commander that Mangix had used bankai for the first time. Mangix's life was about to change after that meeting with the Captain commander.


RP Sample:
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A bright and sunny day, the wind blows leafs off the trees, birds chirping. "AAAAAAGGHH!!!" A loud thump echoed from the squad 11 barracks. It was Captain Yamada, laying on the floor. ".....another sunny day....another day where I have to actual work, I should be fighting out in the field, that's my true job as this squads captain." Mangix scratched his belly and stretched his arms and legs and yawned. "....Maybe I'll go drink some sake!" Mangix got up dusted himself off and put on his captains jacket and left his office. Walking down the streets of seireitei he was greeted formally by his squad members, and getting kind of annoyed that everyone didn't have the guts to even greet him by his first name. Mangix arrived at the dinning hall and ordered a big heaping bowl of beef dumplings and a big bottle of sake. Mangix sat down and began to rapidly eat the dumplings ordering more and more bowls. After a hour there were empty bowls stacked to the ceiling and 5 sake bottles tipped over on the table. Mangix payed the bill and walked out, even in a worse mood than when he entered. "Well now that that's over.....I guess I can go back to sle.." Just then something floated down beside his face, a hell butterfly right out of the blue. "Hm?" Mangix lifted his hand as the little butterfly landed on his big furry finger. "Attention! Captain Yamada and squad eleven, hollows have been reported outside of the rukon district and we are requesting that Offensive tactics be the ones to take action!" Mangix jumped in the air and shouted a big woohoo!

Outside of the rukon district several hollows drew closer and closer. There just on the outskirts stood Mangix and several shinigami. "Well this is a disappointment...I was expecting more...." Mangix drew his sword and pointed it towards the hollows. "Attack!" With the order Captain Mangix's men sprung into action and began to fight the hollows. One shinigami stopped before racing off. "C..captain Yamada? are you not going to fight sir?" Mangix sighed, and looked at the shinigami. "I'm afraid not...the only way I would have fun with this is if I was the only one fighting." Standing there he looked out into the field of battle and shouted "Everyone retreat, the captain wants to fight!" The men started to retreat back. "Oh no way! the captain is going to fight!" Eagerly retreating back they all stood behind the captain smiling. ".....What are you all up to?" They all smiled with big toothy grins. "N-nothing captain Yamada!, w-w-w-we just love to see our captain enjoy fighting!" Mangix was suspicious at first, but then shrugged it off and jumped out into the battle field. Mangix stood strong and stared down the incoming hollows. "Intoxicate them with the earth, wind and fire! Jousei Myoushu!!" Holding out both his sword and sheath they turned into the bamboo staff and keg that he was so famous for. Mangix uncorked the keg and tied it to his staff and began to wave it around spreading the sweet intoxicating aroma of sake. The hollows began to stagger and fall over, amazingly they had all become drunk from the sake aroma. "I'm sorry that you have to go out like this but..." Mangix untied the bamboo keg from his staff. "But as a captain of the thirteen court guard squads, I must follow the Captain Commanders orders." Taking a big swig of the sake out of the keg, he blew the sake out of his mouth in the form of flames burning all of the hollow. One by one the hollows disappeared into nothing and completely vanished. Mangix sighed as his zanpaktou returned to normal and turned to look at his men. As he turned around he found his squad laying all over the place, drunk. "CaPtAiN!, YoU RuLe!" Mangix stood there....his eye twitching, a vein showing in his head. "YOU IDIOTS!!!!!" Magnix shouted and began to chase them back to the barracks. "No shinigami gets drunk for free off my zanpaktou!"


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Re: Mangix Yamada [Captain of division 11] [Waiting for approval ^.^]

Post by :.Daydreamer.: on Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:04 pm

'Sup, dude. Just have a few problems with your app.


  • Unreleased Zanpaktou have no abilities. Not even something such as yours: Degradation of cognition. I gotta admit, though...Beating up someone while they're hammered would be hella funny. So
  • Mind putting images in Spoiler tags? Just keeps things neater.
  • So...your Bankai. Your character becomes three different Panda? And each one has control over a different Element. Not digging that too much, man. One Element per Shinigami is the rule, even in Bankai. Also, it shouldn't change themes. Your Shikai dealt with intoxicating the opponent. Your Bankai should do the same, but simply on a larger, more powerful level.
  • Your History says that you damaged a Hollow. Hollow are spiritual beings, and can't be damaged by conventional means, such as claws of an earthly animal.


I'll look at it more when you fix these things. Razz

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Re: Mangix Yamada [Captain of division 11] [Waiting for approval ^.^]

Post by Mangix on Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:21 pm

Okay but you gotta read it some more, I stated that I was separated from my earthly body as so was my master.

Second of all, (not trying to argue, more of pointing something out)If you wanna get into detail about earthly things not being able to touch those of spiritual things. *Pulls out big book of bleach fun facts and nerdy glasses* In the first season of bleach when Rukia met Yasatoro (Chad) Sado, the episode where the hollow was chasing down a boy's soul in a bird's body, chad was not only able to kick the hollow's leeches off of Rukia with just his shoe, but was also able to hit the hollow with a telephone pole. All this, and Chad wasn't even able to see spirits yet until he got his powers saving Ichigo's sister karin.

Third.......I can see what your saying with my zanpaktou and I agree.....wtf was I thinking?
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Post by :.Daydreamer.: on Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:33 pm

Point taken about the Physical and Spiritual contact. And let me correct myself on something. You're allowed to have more that one Element, but that's something rather for advanced Captains, such as Ukitake. And, even then, he only had two. But, yeah. Still need to follow your Sake theme. Also, try watching out for grammar and misspellings? As a Captain, a lot is going to be expected from you, and that includes being the best of the best when it comes to your literacy.

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Post by Mangix on Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:44 pm

Very well, I will began to be paranoid with the spell checker Razz
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Post by Traca Carmesim on Tue Sep 07, 2010 4:53 pm

- Well first off I'd like to see a little bit more in the physical description and personality, they seem rather short for a Captain level application. Another solid paragraph should do it, shouldn't be too difficult.


Released Zanpakuto Description: The sword turns into a long very sturdy bamboo staff that can withstand the force from almost any weapon.

Well first off this phrase is better omitted, stronger weapons, most especially those from Released Arrancar or Bankai, would be able to deal damage or potentially break a Shikai level weapon, its just common sense. I'm aware of how hard bamboo is, but be realistic concerning the Bleach universe.


The joints in the staff have bristles used to cut open the opponents carapace to give the victim intoxication by small hints of sake, the more you get cut, the more intoxicated one gets.

First off, for your benefit, it'd be better to cover the whole stick, makes things better and more simple. Also, can you please detail how the intoxication works? How intoxicated do they become per cut? Do heavier cuts cause more intoxication? What do the varying levels of intoxication cause, blurred vision, slurred speech (could make Kido harder to use in such a case), loss of coordination, etc. and how effective? When does it work out of the system? Details please, details.


The Sheath turns into a heavy keg that weighs close to 100 pounds. The keg carrys sake that when opened releases a thick cloud of the aroma of a rich sake. The aroma can quickly intoxicate one if they don't know how to handle their liquore.

I'd just say it releases an aroma of liquor in X ft around the weapon and causes x amount of intoxication (based on how you choose to go about measuring and describing the induced intoxication). People being able to handle their liquor is very subjective, itd be wise to avoid that issue all together. Does the cloud obscure vision? Does it hinder a sense of smell?


The keg can be tied to the end of the staff to be used like a hammer, it can be used to shake the very earth it's self.

If you opened the keg to release the chemicals within, wouldn't using it like a hammer knock the contents out and waste all of it? Swinging it would dump the contents too, so you may want to think about that.

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How close can one be to the dragon before being intoxicated? How large is the dragon? How long? The tether should have a maximum length, or at least consume more reiatsu the longer you extend it past a certain point.
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Post by FallenAngel on Thu Oct 28, 2010 4:52 pm

Archived for the time being.
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