Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

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Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Fri Sep 03, 2010 11:08 pm

Basic Information

Name: Tenshin Kaminaka

Age: 787

Gender: Male

Division: 7

Seat: Captain

Looks:
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Tenshin has light Brown hair, that flows a reasonable distance down the back of his head, reaching his neck, if left untamed. He has full facial hair, which he keeps trimmed short, and has his somewhat long hair tied back into a slick ponytail, which is not visible from the front. He has 2 wisp like bangs coming down about an inch on either side of his forehead. His skin is olive-colored, and slightly tan. He has thick eyebrows, and piercing blue eyes which are accentuated by his eyebrows, That many have often remark seem to gaze directly into one's soul. His face is almost always passive; his smiles and expressions of emotion are typically never prominently dispalyed on his features. Many think him to be ruggedly handsome, but with a very austere and aloof demeanor that almost negates his attractiveness to would be suitors. His Chin He has a presence of seemingly utter tranquility; calm, focused, and content. His face has no birthmarks and is fairly smooth, and he has a flat nose and thin lips. He has an odd yellow birthmark on his left hand, which is shaped like a star glinting in the night sky. He appears to be in relatively good shape, with broad shoulders, along with a well-shaped body. His arms are noticeably muscular, not as muscle-bound as some, but to the point where he is noticeably in good shape. Were he to remove his clothing, it would reveal a body almost completely unscarred and unblemished- surprising for a man who clearly has a high amount of combat experience. His nails both on his hands and feet are kept well-manicured. His body possesses little hair as well, only having small amounts in chest cavity and on the legs. His posture is excellent, and he always stands fully to his height of 6 feet 3 inches.

Alignment Lawful Good/Neutral (in the middle somewhere)

Personality: Tenshin to all around him is a very calm, cool individual. He is friendly, but also very distant. With his subordinates though, he often becomes more personal, taking time out of his duties as a captain to assist them with their training or ask them about their problems, but he will be strict when is necessary, especially during drills and when enforcing the law, and his squad members almost unanimously respect him for this quality. He is a brilliant tactician, but he also possesses a strong code of ethics that he has set down for himself, and will never allow unnecessary sacrifices to be made. When approaching a forthcoming battle or war, he tries to think of strategies that would save the maximum number of shinigami's lives, while still absolutely completing the mission to the fullest. He has come to feel that with the rise of hell, the Seireitei serves as the last chance of order and peace this world has, and so believes that in order for them to survive, orders need to be followed without question. He possesses a strong hatred for Arrancar, from his limited encounters with them he feels they are nothing more than abominations, monsters who have come to threaten this world. He feels that while protecting the human world is important, in a war such as this it takes second place over the survival of the Seireitei, and therefore is reluctant to allot a very large number of forces to fighting on that front, believing that by doing so he will only be endangering more shinigami.

However, he tries to keep a mask of tranquility and absolute self-assuredness up at all times, even when making the extremely difficult decisions which wartime forces generals to make, in order to inspire confidence in those below him, thanks in great part to the advice and help of Ten-no-Te. This seeming utter calmness however, is not because of his great resolve, but moreover because he has his on personal council whom with he can confer on his true feelings. In his inner realm, he becomes what most resembles a simpering wad of sentimentality, or anger, or joy. With Ten-no-Te, whose nature he considers the closest thing to perfect he has ever encountered, he becomes what resembles one of the most sensitive people imaginable. Were others to see into his inner realms, and his inner conversations, they would doubtlessly wonder how such a naive- over-emotional weakling, who resembled a child having a tantrum or crying because he fell off his bike ever became a captain. But because of this interaction with a zanpakutou, on the outer world he is able to practically emulate Ten-no-Te's personality, rather than his own. However, when he is confronting arrancar, this cool demeanor evaporates. The presence, the very existence of such beings, as a whole, infuriates him, and he becomes more resemblent to a wrathful fanatic, than his typical calm- counselor like nature.


Zanpakuto Information

Zanpakuto Name: Ten-no-Te

Zanpakuto Looks:
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The hilt of the zanpakutou is very ornate, and at first glance, may cause others to believe that the blade is almost ceremonial. The handle is made of Petrified rosewood, which is not terribly heavy, but serves to perfectly balance the blade. It is carved in a complex pattern that resembles swirling clouds. Surrounding the grip at two points are dual golden bands, each of which is inscribed with one word: The top, 'never' the bottom 'forget'. the pommel is made from gold as well, and has an image of a griffin inlaid into it. The crosspiece, however, is the most interestingly designed part of the zanpakutou. It is made of gold, as is the pommel, but within it are engraved several images that perfectly resemble the stained glass windows of Tenshins inner world. The blade itself is double edged, and perfectly straight from its tip to its base. It is roughly three and a half feet long, and two inches thick.

Zanpakuto Description: N/a

Released Zanpakuto Description: The Main Ability of Ten-no-Te's Shikai is the manipulation of Divine, or what Tenshin classifies as 'holy' energy. This energy can be directed toward both destructive, and restorative purposes, however Tenshin soley uses it destructively. The zanpakutou's release automatically begins to generate this energy, and Tenshin can generate as much of it as he wants based on how much reaitsu he uses, manipulating the energy into various offensive abilities. Once the shikai is activated, holy energy flows through the blade, causing it to deal increased damage to soul-based enemies. To all those it hits, every strike that that penetrates their defenses and manages to draw blood, it will automatically deal the damage of a level 25 hadou spell to the creatures very essence, essentially ignoring physical defenses such as hierro. To the afflicted, it feels as if burning energy is passing through inside them, and while it is more painful than is damaging, enough succesful blows, that don't necessarily inflict enormous physical damage, can do enough damage internally to cripple an opponent. This energy can also be manipulated into several additional abilities.

Zanpakuto Release Phrase: Reveal the light of Heaven, Ten-no-Te

Released Zanpakuto Looks: The blade is completely white, from base to tip, a an aura of wisp like, golden energy permeates around it. The rosewood part of the grip has also turned completely white, so that the zanpakutou is a mixture of white and gold colors.

Zanpakuto Spirit: Spirit:
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Appearance: Ten-no-Te's Spirit takes the form of a magnificent, armored being that is best described as an angel. This angel is female, but is clad in heavy, golden armor, which overlays a long robe which covers her from feet to neck. She wears a pure white cowl, which at a distance covers her face completely, and has a passive expression that to must would be considered icy, but to Tenshin is as welcoming as a warm breeze. Both her hands are typically empty, however, on will she can conjure a massive, red sword in the shape of a cross, which has all the abilities of Ten-no-Te. This was the weapon she used when Tenshin fought against her to obtain bankai. She has two obvious bright golden wings, which appear to almost be larger than the being herself. From behind her cowl there is a massive, glorious, intricate halo which appears behind her as a circle. From the bottom of her robes hang tags inscribed with several words including "Peace, Serenity, Justice, Wrath, Salvation.'

Personality: : Ten-no-Te has been a guiding light in Tenshin's life for a long time, even before he became a shinigami- though the connection between the two of them was significantly weaker then. The zanpakutou acts almost a conscience, and source of higher wisdom for Tenshin. The often communicate, even sometimes converse for hours on end, over the moral implications of the decisions Tenshin makes. When he has concerns, he often will seek Ten-no-Te's council to help him know the right thing to do. Ten-no-Te personally is a very calm and spiritually attuned being, who views Tenshin almost as a child it must watch over and protect and teach. Tenshin, while in the outside world, is a very different person than he is when he is communicating with Ten-no-Te. The zanpakutou also possesses a deeper sympathy for Tenshin than most zanpakutou have with their masters, and knows when to say a kind word, when Tenshin needs her support, and when Tenshin needs someone to simply listen to his concerns. In a way, she almost acts a sort of mother and deity to Tenshin simultaneously. She can be kind, yet callous, warm, yet divine and distant all at once. Without her, Tenshin long ago would have lost his sanity. She has incredible wisdom, and knows Tenshin better than he knows himself. When Tenshin was lost in the rukongai, wallowing in self-pity, though their connection was not as strong, she was still able to reach out to him from deep within, and become a source of support that he need to have the will to keep living.

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Bankai Information
(This applies to captains, and advanced lieutenants only)

Bankai Name: Mitsukai Ten-no-Te

Bankai Description: The strength of the holy energy surging through the blade is significantly increased, causing internal done to enemies by 15 levels (up to level 40). The blade turns into a weapon of pure holy energy, similar to that created by his sheath of everflowing light

Passive Increases: He can see twice as far and twice as fast, and his speed, strenght, and reflexes increased by 25%.

Divine Armor: While in bankai, Tenshin gains a breastplate, and shoulderpads, of shining silver armor, inlaid with crosses. This armor is very potent, and functions in a fashion almost similar to hierro. It vastly reduces the force of many physical attacks, challenging for even shikai-level weapons to penetrate. It also nullifies kido level 40 and below.

Divine Sight: While in bankai, Tenshins eyes become completely golden with reaitsu. While this may not seem like much, these eyes are one of his bankai's most powerful effects. They are immune to being blinded through any physical means (dirt, being stabbed etc, while in bankai, he will be able to continue to see, after release falls, that eye will obviously lose vision.

Shikai abilities: Tenshin can continue to use his chosen generated weapon from his 'Sheath of Everflowing Light' ability, and its power increases at the same level the power of Ten-no-Te itself increases, possessing the same passive abilities, gaining the strength of a bankai level weapon. The power of Smite is increased by 15 levels, giving it the strength of a level 60 kido. Any 'holy' element kido he uses has its level raised by 5.

Bankai Looks: Tenshin's shihaksho has turned completely white, and now has a hood which drapes over his head similar to that possessed by his zanpakutou spirit. His eyes have also turned completely golden, and now look more like spheres of holy energy than eyes. These new eyes are incapable of being blinded, or having their vision impaired in any way. He also now has a shining silver breastplate laid over the top of his shihaksho, inlaid with a giant red cross. There are several white-cloth like ribbons that extend out behind from his robe at certain point that seem to perpetually flutter. His sword transforms into a weapon of complete holy energy, and is perpetually surrounded by holy flames. However the most predominant aspect of his bankai are the wings that form. Two enormous, golden wings made of reaitsu form on his back, each appearing to be folded.

Kido:

Name:Strike
Number:9
Type:Bakudou
Description: Engulfs the target in red light, completely paralyzing them.

Name: Beak-Stab Triple-flash
Number: 30
Type: Bakudou
Descritption: After using kido energy to draw out an Equilateral triangle, the targets Arms and legs are pinned down.

Name: Lightning stasis
Number: 36
Type: Bakudou
Description: A bolt of lightning is shot from the casters finger, and enters the targeted opponent. The lightning causes the nervous system to become disoriented, and prevent muscle movement

Name: Arc Shield
Number: 39
Type: Bakudou
Description: A shield of energy is created, blocking attacks.

Name: Ice Block
Number: 43
Type: Bakudou
Description: After placing ones hand on the targets chest, the target is instantaneously frozen in a thick block of ice. How fast the target escapes depends on his or her reaitsu. While within the ice, they cannot be harmed in anyway, and can perform no action.

Name: Six Rod Light Prison
Number: 61
Type: Bakudou
Description: Summons six thin, but wide, beams of light that slam into a target's midsection, holding them in place.

Name: Hundred Stepped Rails
Number: 62
Type: Bakudou
Description: A rod formed of energy is thrown towards the target before it disintegrates into numerous short rods which are used to pin the target to the surroundings and render them immobile.

Name: Prison of Fire
Number: 70
Type: Bakudou
Element: Fire
Description: the target is trapped from six sides by dense walls of fire, which burn upon contact. This barrier can be dispersed with a sufficiently potent kido-like ability (level 75 or higher)

Name: Quintet of Iron Pillars
Number: 75
Type: Bakudou
Description: summons 5 incredibly tall and thick iron pillars to pin a target to the ground.

Name: Splitting Void
Number: 81
Type: Bakudo
Description: Creates an energy barrier in the form of a rectangular wall, capable of blocking destructive spells up to level 89.

Name: Twin Serpent Bind
Number: 86
Type: Bakudo
Element: Holy
Description: The user must grab the enemies arm, and then shout the kido name and number, or incantation if they have tim. After this is done, two beams of golden energy, appearing snake-like in nature, course out of the casters arm, snaking around that of the target. The beams go all around the targets body, binding him completely in place, and preventing him from using any reaitsu, however, the users arm is also restricted from movement, thereby he must too stand in place, but he is still capable of using his other arm. This is excellent for trapping enemies in close quarters.
Incantation: Twin serpents descend from heaven, and enshroud my foe, the emperor's twin pets, constricting into the four sectors with 8 dragons on their heels.

Name: Freezing Wasteland
Number: 87
Type: Bakudou
Element: Ice
Description: The earth around the caster is blanketed in a thick glacier for around 20 yards, freezing any caught up in it.
Incantation: The grip of the north sweeps over the land, as continents collapse and the heavens are chilled. The hand of death rises, laying its chilled touch upon the living.

Name: Divine Shield
Number: 89
Type: Bakudo
Element: Holy
Description: Creates a bubble of energy around Tenshin that, while preventing him from moving or attacking or casting further kido, provides enormous levels of protection from enemy attacks. Tenshin can let the shield drop whenever he so chooses.
Incantation: Blessed hands of heaven, protect thou own!

Name: White Lightning
Number: 4
Type: Hadou
Description: Fires a concentrated bolt of white lightning from the caster's forefinger

Name: Searing Light
Number: 25
Type: Hadou
Element: Holy
Description: A concentrated burst of bright light comes forth from the caster, destroying enemies eyesight, and causing immense occular pain, similar as if the target had been sprayed with a can of potent pepper spray. It has a range of 50 yards for its full effect, any further than that would only cause minor blindless for a post, that can still be squinted through.

Name: Frostbolt
Number: 30
Type: Hadou
Element: Ice
Description: Fires a concentrated bolt of liquid ice at the target

Name: Shot of Red Fire
Number: 31
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire
Description: Fires a ball of red fire at a target

Name: Blue Fire, Crash Down
Number: 33
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire
Description:Fires a column of blue fire at a target in a similar manner to 31, but over a wider area and with more power

Name: Laguna Blade
Number: 40
Type: Hadou
Element: Lightning
Description: Fires a wide, thickly concentrated burst of blue lightning from the casters fist (a more powerful version of Hadou 4)

Name: Abolishing Flames
Number: 54
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire
Description: Fires a blast of purple fire which will incinerate a target completely when it makes contact

Name: Whirling Tempest
Number: 58
Type: Hadou
Element: Wind
Description: A widening tornado-like blast is fired towards the target

Name: Light Grenade
Number: 59
Type: Hadou
Element: Holy
Description: The user holds his hand out in front of him in a C shape, and gathers kido energy. They then fling their hand forward, fingers extended, and shoots out a sphere of kido energy. The sphere moves rapidly toward the target, and then explodes upon contact or at the users discretion in a wide blast

Name: Thunder roar cannon
Number: 63
Type: Hadou
Description: Fires a massive wave of yellow lightning at the target

Name: Light Strike Array
Number: 67
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire/Holy
Description: the user targets an area of ground, a circle with a radius of about 20 yards, which has a bright yellow circle drawn around it momentarily, and calls forth a pillar of energy from the sun to Strike down upon it, incinerating all hit by the blast. The light produced by the attack is very bright, so those who do survive are stunned by the brightness.

Name: Twin Lotus Blue fire, Crash Down
Number: 73
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire
Description: essentially a doubled version of #33, this technique fires two shots of blue flame with greater potency than the single shot counterpart

Name: Frostfire Bolt
Number: 76
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire/Ice
Description: Fires a fused bolt of fire and frost, causing it to constantly shift between a burning red and a freezing blue. This attack both burns and Freezes the enemy

Name: Dragon Slave
Number: 82
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire
Description: After shouting the incantation, a giant dragon made of fire appears before the caster and surges forward, burning everything its path.

Name: Black Lightning Ball
Number: 84
Type: Hadou
Description: the user recites the incantation while holding out his palm, fingers spread and curved upward, in front of him. A ball of black matter forms above his hand, which is intensified concentrated electricity. He then holds the ball out in front of him where it ruptures and erupts into hundreds of thick bolts of black lightning which send a huge wave out in a conical direction toward the target.

Name: Heavenly grenade
Number: 88
Type: Hadou
Element: Holy
Description: The user recites the incantation, and then rapidly gestures 20-30 times at various points surrounding the target. At each of these points a bright, dense ball of golden Kido energy will appear. After all the points of have been selected, the user clenches his fist, and the balls home in and descend on the target, creating a massive explosion. Even if the target moves, the attacks will follow him or her for a certain distance before exploding.
Incantation: Heaven’s fury comes crashing forth, god’s anger is shown. Beads of sweat emerge of the stars as the heavens and earth alike tremble before the untimely wrath of creation and destruction alike, and the universe cries out as its power collides into a single divine point.

Name: Angel’s Blade
Number: 89
Type: Hadou
Element: Holy
Description: Unleashes a powerful, gigantic blade of golden energy from the user’s fist which pierces and burns away at any caught in its path. After piercing a target, the blade erupts in multiple directions, mutilating any impaled.
Incantation: The Army of the blessed descends from the clouds. In their fury, 10,000 divine beings strike out, a single powerful lash destroying the heartless.

Techniques:
Technique Name: Blade Wall
Technique Type: Zanjutsu
Degree of difficulty: Expert
Description: Using two hands, in addition to his reaitsu, Tenshin spins his sword in front of him rapidly, so rapidly that it generates a blue wall of reaitsu as the blade spins. This wall of reaitsu is very strong, and is capable of blocking almost any physical attack, along with hadou up to level 80. The downside to this technique is it forces his wrists to bend at an unnatural angle, therefore he must stand still while performing it. once per two post cooldown.

Technique Name: Mirror Image
Technique Type: Movement/Zanjutsu
Degree of difficulty: Master
Description: A master level sword skill, where, by using zanjutsu effectively in combination with quick movements, the fighter incorporates miniature flash steps into his combat routine, which, when used perfectly, cause there to appear to be an after image left after each blow that continues the motion. The user needs to be able to reverse and halt strikes as quickly as he makes them, which is why it requires great skill in swordsmanship. This can be used to disorient opponents, or to even sneak behind an enemies back without them being able to realize it until a moment

Technique Name: Air Wall
Technique Type: Zanjutsu
Degree of difficulty: Intermediate-Master
Description: A commonly used technique amongst the higher ranks of the Seireitei's military. This requires a significant amount of reaitsu to be able to perform, however, is not terribly draining. By gathering ones reaitsu, and peaking it as they make a swing, the combatant can create a wall of pure-reaitsu filled air shoot out from the tip of his blade. Depending on the strength of the combatant, and their reaitsu control, this can be merely intimidating, or can become equivalent to a forceful shockwave that can hurl enemies back significantly. When used against foes significantly weaker than oneself (such as a captain dealing with a mass of low-level hollows) it can be used to decimate large numbers very quickly, with minimal effort.

Technique Name: Divine Storm
Technique Type: : Zanjutsu/ Zanpakutou
Degree of difficulty: Master
Description: A Technique that Tenshin can only use while in bankai or shikai and only while wielding an additional weapon. Typically done in a moment when he has a brief pause in his swordsmanship routine, or when he has gained an advantage , and feels he can use this to deliver enormous damage, Tenshin will focus reaitsu into his weapons, and then spin rapidly, striking with both weapons at the enemy in rapid succession. This technique is very difficult to use as it requires expert footwork, and careful placement in order to be effective, as well as to prevent himself from losing the momentum of the technique when his blows connect. It will create a swath of golden energy around him as he performs it, due to the energy of his zanpakutou, thus leading to the name he has called the technique which he has made his own.

Technique Name: Smite
Technique Type: Zanpakutou
Degree of difficulty: Shikai
Description: One of his Ten-no-te's mmore basic offensive special abilities Tenshin has identified as 'Smite'. Tenshin will grab his sword in both hands, and swing in the direction he wishes to aim the technique. At the target location, this will create a slice of holy energy which slices in a similar motion to that Tenshin made with his zanpakutou. This energy will slash, much like a blade of fire out of Tenshins sword, and bear down on the enemy, inflicting damage upon contact based upon the strength of the opponent and their defenses. It possesses the power of a level 45 hadou spell.

Technique Name: Sheath of Everflowing Light.
Technique Type: : Zanpakutou
Degree of difficulty: Shikai
Description: Another of the special abilities of Ten-no-Te's shikai is known as "Sheath of Everflowing Light" After releasing the blade, the sheath of the zanpakutou over the next post generates holy energy. Upon the following post, Tenshin can withdraw this energy with his offhand, and use it to form a melee weapon of pure holy energy of his choosing of any form, and the energy will solidify itself to take on the physical properties of the chosen weapon, other than few obvious ones, such as it no longer vibrates terribly heavily, and does not conduct electricity. This is done by concentrating and sharpening the energy as necessary in different points, for example, if he were to make a secondary sword, most of the energy would be concentrated in the blade to improve its strength and sharpness. However, the weight of this weapon to Tenshin can be altered as he so chooses. After the weapon is formed it will retain its shape for the next 6 posts, and has the same basic properties as Ten-no-Te itself. He can generate a different weapon each post, however, generating a new one disperse the previous one. Certain weapons take longer than others to create however. Creating a standard single hand weapon such as a short-sword or one-handed mace can be created instantly. Larger weapons, such as polearms, or battleaxes or greatswords, take 2 posts to generate, and a shield takes 3.

Technique Name: Pennance
Technique Type: : Zanpakutou
Degree of difficulty: Bankai
Description:The first ability Tenshin gains in bankai is known as Pennance. Consuming 20% of his reaitsu, he creates a volley ofholy energy, that launches from the tip of his blade onto the target. It comes in three large waves that resemble golden globes of spiraling energy each one roughly 4 feet in diameter, all of them arriving within a second of one another, and move very quickly. When the target is hit, the blasts will deal damage equivalent to a level 90 hadou spell. The light will burn away at them, hurting more than a 3rd degree burn, and often destroying weaker targets utterly.

Technique Name: Storm of Lost Lights.
Technique Type: : Zanpakutou
Degree of difficulty: Bankai
Description: His third bankai is known as 'The Storm of Lost Lights' This technique is possibly his most powerful but also his most exhausting. Costing 25% of his reaitsu, he raises his blade to the sky, and rapidly golden balls of energy begin streaming out in every direction, and start to orbit around the blade rapidly. After a few short seconds, several thousand such spheres have formed and begun spiraling the area out to a distance of five hundred yards. Each sphere is roughly the size of two fists clenched together and leaves a trail of light as it spirals, almost like a shooting star. There is very little space in between each sphere due to the sheer number, perhaps a foot or two at most. Each one, on contact with any spiritual being, will deal damage equivalent to a level 30 hadou, and will explode in a burst of light, burning away at the enemy. Therefore, no matter the power of the being, it is extremely difficult for one to stand in the storm and survive very long, as they will constantly be buffeted by dozens of such blasts, killing even strong foes very rapidly. The storms number of blasts constantly increases, so it is veritably impossible to attempt to block all of them through some method and expect that the technique would be . However, within a 10 yard radius of Tenshin, the storm ceases, therefore, enemies can escape by coming within to that short range, which is often most opponents only option.

Technique Name: Holy Fire.
Technique Type: : Zanpakutou
Degree of difficulty: Bankai
Description: Holy Fire is another powerful offensive ability Tenshin gains in bankai. This attack can be used in one of two methods upon each use. Tenshin can choose to either raise his zanpakutou to the sky above him, channel his reaitsu through Ten-no-Te, and then swing the blade down. This will create a pillar of burning holy energy to bombard the target from above with enormous destructive force, the greatest of any individual attack in Tenshin's arsenal. However, when using this attack method, the pillar is only roughly a radius of 5 feet, and is therefore relatively easy to dodge, as the location for the attack is chosen at the start of technique, so Tenshin typically must bind an opponent or fool them into standing still long enough for the attack to hit. The other manner in which he can use this technique is, after he has gathered the necessary energy, he can stab the blade into the ground beneath him. This will create a blast wave on energy around him in all directions for about 30 yards, however, it sacrifices much of its power, only possessing half the damage potential of the pillar style attack to those hit by the blast wave.

History and RP Sample

History: Tenshin was born in Venice during the late 1500's, as a street rat. He never knew or met his parents, and was left out on the sidewalks in the winter of 1598. He would have died as a baby, were it not for the kindness of two other street dwellers, brother and sister teenagers Giovanni, and Amelia. He had no name, so they gave him one, based on something they had heard about a recent Italian expedition to Japan and named him after a warlord from there: 'Tenshin Kaminaka' which they had heard meant 'Inner God' or something like that. Life was incredibly hard as a street rat. Indeed, Asano would have not lived to see his first spring were it not for the benevolence of his two guardians. They were poor, and toughened from the streets, but still kind-hearted. They begged, they stole, they did what they could to get buy as Tenshin began to grow up. He learned the tricks of the trade early. At the age of four, he had already been exposed to enormous amounts of hardship, and was toughened to the degree that most adults can scarcely imagine. He had become an exceptionally talented pickpocket, bringing home more money than his two guardians on a daily basis despite his small size. However, despite the modest upbringing in which he grew up in, he desired to achieve something greater... He had seen the mansions in which the rich of Venice lived, and he realized that he had a deep hunger within himself to strive for more wealth, and power, so he could look the noble-born dead in the eye and show them how even a born street-rat could live at their level. And so, at the age of 12, the unnaturally cunning Tenshin began the thief's guild, its first two members his older adoptive brother and sister. Tenshin was in his own right a genius, in not only intellect but in street smarts. His underground guild grew rapidly, bringing in dozens of young outcasts who had been left by the wayside of Venice society. All youth, some older than himself, and some younger, who looked up to him like a father. The question of his authority arose only once-- a little over a year after the guild had formed. A 16 year old named Otto Braun, one night declared that he was more suitable to lead the thief's guild than was Tenshin, a challenge which Tenshin readily accepted.

The two were given sabres that the guild had procured, and told to fence to the death. The fight lasted not five seconds. No sooner had Otto begun charging, and they had been told to fight, Tenshin dropped his sword, and flicked his wrist. A dagger was stuck straight through the middle of Otto's neck. Tenshin removed his weapon, wiped it off with a cloth, and had two other members of the guild which now contained dozens remove the body. His authority was never questioned again. Life was good in the Thieves guild. As they grew in size, skill, and resources, Tenshin became more and more daring. 4 years after the birth of guild, They attempted a stunt that bordered in many's mind on insanity. The plan was to overthrow the small noble house of Montolio, and turn their mansion into a base of operations for the now prominent guild. They were armed, prepared, and they struck in the dead of night, armed with crossbows, poison daggers, and more. Teenagers overthrew guards. In a single night, the head of Montolio de Brauchee, head of the household, hung on a pike. Poor civilians across Venice, who had secretly been supporting the uprising against the nobility, rejoiced. The nobles, who had previously viewed the guild as a petty rabble of no more than a hundred, realized the true strength of it, and the dastardly cunning that its leader possessed.

However, as the prominence and power of the thief's guild grew, so did the arrogance of its leader. He raided trade caravans, and began to take true control over the streets of Venice. He had his own private army, numbering in over a hundred of top-notch assassins and thieves. The noble houses were in chaos, their trade with other noble houses was falling apart, and their functionality had been almost completely halted by the Thieves guild. Finally, when they could tolerate it no longer, the Nobles of Venice united against the Thieves Guild. Up to this point, Giovanni and Amelia had been warning him to proceed cautiously, and not incur the nobles wrath, but he took no heed of their advice. He believed himself mightier and more cunning than any mere noble household. And so, it was on the night of his 19th birthday, that the Nobles struck back. A united army of over 2000 stormed the Thieves Guild stronghold. Tenshin's soldiers did the best they could to hold them off, killing hundreds with careful traps and skill, but in the end sheer numbers won out. Catapults, and archers assaulted the walls. Dozens died. Dozens more, who held their own self-preservation above all, fled. Tenshin stayed. He had accomplished his dream, he believed, and though he would die young, he would die with his ambition realized. He fought vigorously, like a madman, cutting down dozens. finally, after recieving many wounds from many soldiers, he fell between the over-whelming number, but not before seeing Giovanni and Amelia die, and a twinge of great regret aching through his heart.

Rukongai Arc: After he arrived in the soul society, Tenshin was sorted into district 71. With real memory of his former life, all he could remember were the faces of Giovanni, and Amelia, and all he could feel was regret, and anger. Anger towards himself, towards the world, towards everything. He couldn't remember the names of these two faces, all he knew that they had been his friends, and that he had failed them. He nearly starved several times, once having to beat a street vendor half to death merely to get food, which was then very nearly stolen from him. He had never thought that afterlife would be as horrible a place as the real world, but the grim reality of that fact took him slowly, for what little he cared about coporeal matters. He was dying on the inside from regret, from the loss, of people whose names he could no longer remember. It was there, in this dark place, that a voice came to him. At first it was only whispers, mostly while he slept, it echoed. "All is not lost." It called to him in the night. He awoke each morning feeling changed, but often shrugging it off, or dismissing it as delusions. But as time wore on, he began to hear it more and more clearly. In his dreams, he began to see a place he knew he had never been- but that somehow felt familiar, and welcoming.

With each passing day, the world around him began to seem a little- just a little- less dark and gloomy. He slowly stopped wallowing in self-loathing and self-pity. He began to see a figure when he slept- the most beautiful being he had ever seen, but when he tried to call out to it no voice came. However, as He awoke he began to see that he was not the only one suffering here. He was not the only one who had bitter eyes. The truth of his district began to dawn on him, if only gradually. And despite the suffering he saw, he realized that a chance for redemption was awaiting him right here, in this small district. Though he may have failed those long-lost friends, he could still help these people. And maybe, just maybe, he could atone for whatever he had done in life. He began doing what he could to help the most needy of his district, the abandoned orphans, the very elderly. He stole food, he protected them from thugs. Little by little, thanks to the help of the voice in his dreams, he began to become a hero to those of his district. He came up with grandiose ideas, such as starting orphanages, and making a more successful food system, so that all districts could have enough- ideas he knew were farfetched given his current position. He knew that though he was helping a small group of people, and bettering their lives, there had to be something more he could do. And it was then that it came to him. He looked off at the distant spires of the Seireitei, and realized what he had to do. For all these people.

Shinigami Arc: Tenshin entered the academy with determination, and resolve. He had to find a way to rise through the ranks of the shinigami, in order to help those he had left behind. His academy instructors were both surprised and impressed by his seemingly innate skill at swordsmanship, and he quickly advanced to the top of his class. He had no idea why he was so excellent at swordsmanship to start with, the moves just seem to flow through him without him having to think about it. He had no idea it was from the years of training he had had during his lifetime, but his natural talent gave him more time to focus on his kido, and he quickly became an excellent student in both practices. However, from the start, the Asauchi he was given felt awkward, and unfamiliar in his hands. Though he was still able to fight with it, he found himself often during practice trying to do moves that the shape of the blade made difficult, and that his instructors had never taught, without fully understanding why. While it never deeply impaired him, he couldn't help but constantly have this feeling that this type of sword was not what he was meant to wield. His leadership skills on missions was also remarkable and the instructors took note of his out of the box thinking and exceptional deductive reasoning capacities. It was because all these factors that He was perhaps the first graduate in the history of the academy to be sky-rocketed to the rank of lieutenant immediately upon graduation.

Tenshin was assigned as vice-captain of the 7th division, thanks to his skill as a leader, and his keen mind. However, though the higher-ups in soul society may have deemed him worthy- that didn't mean his squad did. And so, within an hour of his arrival, the third seat of the 7th division - a soldier much his senior- had challenged Tenshin to a Death Match, furious that his years of hard work had not earned him the position, and that some academy runt had recieved the position ahead of him. Nervous, and scared, Tenshin at the time was only over 30- barely out of his diapers by Soul Society standards, tried to ask the third seat to back down, but the man merely laughed. "You coward." He said. "You shouldn't even be a ranked officer, let alone a lieutenant" The man then spat at his feet. "See you at noon" So, Tenshin walked down to the chosen field, fully expecting to die, and thinking of all the others he would fail back in district 71, all the unfulfilled promises he had made. All eyes were upon him as he entered the chosen arena, where the third seat already waited for him, waiting casually, Zanpakutou already drawn. Tenshin took a deep breath, and placed his slowly on the hilt of his Zanpakutou. No sooner had he done this, than the voice rang in his head once again. "At long last Tenshin. We finally meet."

And suddenly the scene changed. He stood in a massive, glorious building, full of light, with windows of beautifully stained glass, and magnificent architecture, unlike anything he had seen in this world. He had seen this place before, but only in glimpses, but now, finally, he took in the great cathedral that was what he now knew to be his inner realm. And before him, stood an angel. He fell to his knees, mouth open wide in awe, whispering, barely able to the words. "Are.. are you?" It smiled, and knelt down, placing a hand on his shoulder. "Yes Tenshin. I am the one who pulled you from the darkness. I am your Zanpakutou. I am Ten-no-Te. Since you came to this world, I knew our fates would be tied together. That is why I led you from the darkness, here, where we at last can come together, at last can be the two parts of a whole that we were born to be. And as I helped you back in the Rukongai, So shall I help you now." The figure suddenly held a beautiful, ornately designed longsword in its right hand, a sword unlike any Tenshin had ever seen in the Seireitei. Ten-no-Te then held out the sword, pommel first, for Tenshin to grab it.

As he did, he felt a sense of absolute rightness, a sense that this blade had been made for his hand and his hand alone, despite being different from the swords of almost all other shinigami. Ten-no-Te smiled down at him, as he asked 'This is..??' "Yes, Tenshin. That is my shape" Ten-no-Te replied. "You wonder why it is different from those of other shinigami you have seen? That is because you are different than those other shinigami, and, as a part of you, so too am I." The angelic figure rose to its feet it's tone growing harder and commanding, and full of resolve. "Now Tenshin, Rise and strike down those who would threaten you!" And with another flash of light, he was back in the center of the training arena, His opponent now charging toward him. However, no hesitation, no fear, no nerves remained. Only the resolve to do what had to be done. With a single motion, he drew Ten-no-Te, the blade glinting the afternoon sun, and though he had never said it before, he somehow knew the words which had to come next "Reveal the Light of Heaven, Ten-no-Te" The steel suddenly turned pale white, and waves of golden mist began rolling off it. He charged forward, and met the third seat headon. The more experienced fighter didn't even have time to release his own Zanpakuto. Ten-no-Te cut through him with a single swift stroke. The man, stood, stunned, staring down as the blood flowed freely from the enormous wound. But as he fell to the ground, he had time to hear Tenshin whisper to him. "I am sorry" Tenshin said, calmly, but with poignant remorse in his voice. Flicking the blade out to his right, some of the blood from the went flying out from the tip, and landed at the feet of the newly promoted 3rd seat of Squad 7. Tenshin didn't say a word as he left the battleground. No one ever challenged his authority again.

Rise to Captain: Tenshin carried out the duties of his squad loyally and without question. Often times, he returned to district 71, sometimes with some of his squad members, trying to teach them that in order to better their relationships with the rukongai, and gain the support of the commoners, they needed to help these people- especially those still living in squalor, and that their powers could be used towards more productive goals than simply filling out paperwork He delivered food, helped build housing, and tried to bring one of the Rukongai's poorest districts back out of the darkness. Squad members quickly realized that their lieutenants real-world applications of diplomacy were causing the seireitei to gain rukongai favor more quickly than they had ever imagined possible. And in militaristic training, which was required of all divisions, though Tenshin was amiable, he was strict, and pushed his soldiers to their limits. And any such concern was immediately dispelled when the war against the Arrancar began, where even the 7th division was called to the front lines.

The day he first met an arrancar, was a day that would be blazed into his memory forever after. It was a cold, dark morning, and the thirteenth division had just been assigned to help assist the 11th in the fray, pulling them off of their typical duties as the principal defenders of Seireitei, such was the brutal, desperate nature of this war. He and his group of 12 Shinigami had just ventured out into the human world, in order to assist a city that had come under attack only moments ago. No sooner had they arrived, than the squadron of arrancar almost immediately ambushed them. Tenshin, who had been alert since the moment they stepped through the Senkaimon, aware that they were about to face an enemy unlike any they had fought before. So, he was able to draw his sword in time to parry the mighty overhead slash of one of the three arrancar who had set upon his group. However, he was completely unprepared for the brute strength of his attacker, and he was hurled back, into the wall of a nearby building, where, while he was able to recover quickly, he was also able to see the arrancar cut through many of his squad mates like a group of hot knives through a stick of butter. Five of his twelve comrades fell under their blades in under a minute. And even worse than seeing the men and women he had been responsible for fall, was seeing the faces of the arrancar as they cut through his subordinates. Their expressions were carved of purest joy, of utter delight and satisfaction, and worst of all, Tenshin was able to recognize their sentinence. Recognize the fact that they had a choice in what they were doing, and they choose to relish their destructiveness. For the first time in his existence, Tenshin felt total, utter, complete hatred. He could not, and perhaps never would understand these beings, but he could understand that they were the most absolute incarnation of all that was evil, and wrong, and dark that he had ever encountered. And as such, he felt completely compelled to obliterate them. With no mercy, no pause, He rose out of the building, and yelled out. "Reveal the light of heaven, Ten-no-Te." His zanpakutou released, and Tenshin surged forward, full of self-righteousness, feeling utterly righteous in his purpose. He engaged the arrancar full on, slicing and hacking with abandon. The arrancar whom had just sent Tenshin flying through a wall, suddenly found himself hard pressed on the defensive. Tenshin fought aggressively, almost wrathfully, striking with greater speed and strength than he believed he had.

The arrancar he was engaged with, suddenly finding itself in dire straits, against an opponent he had previously thought would be easily dispatched, attempted to release his ressurecion, but was never given the chance. Tenshins sword pierced straight through his hierro, straight into his stomach. However, for the target of Tenshins retribution, that was only the beginning. As it did with hollows, the divine energy coursed through the impure essence of the arrancar's soul- and purified it. Tenshin looked into the arrancar's eyes, his face taught, focused, and angered. He felt no pity as he watched the monster's expression contort in pain, felt no remorse as he held Ten-no-Te there, deep within the arrancar, and let its energy sear through every fiber of this abominations soul. Soon, the energy proved too much for the arrancar to contain, and, in a burst of bright, golden light, it exploded from within, consumed by the divine energy coursing through its body. Tenshin, looking down at Ten-no-Te, communicated only momentarily, but both he and his blade felt no regret. He felt, for the first time in his life, almost a feeling of elation at his act of violence. However, as the other two arrancar retreated, this feeling was quickly tempered, as he was able to see all the destruction they had wrought in so short a time in the human world. The entire city had been wiped out- and not for the purpose of devouring human souls. The sky was red, partially because it was nearly sunset- partially because of the series of crumbling and burning buildings they had left in their wake. Mangled corpses, charred bodies, severed limbs lined the now abandoned streets of the once populous city. Just... for the sheer enjoyment of destruction, of killing... It sickened him. And from then on, he knew that all his training had boiled down to this singular puprose: the annihilation of the arrancar species.

And to make matters worse: he discovered, that this was not just a sole example. Nearly every Arrancar he met was the same way. He found himself loathing them. During this war, He happened to unlock his bankai quite by accident. During a fight in which he had been lured cleverly by several of the monstrous Arrancar into a trap, he was pushed to the point of death. It was then, right as he was about to fall, that his greatest friend and ally, Ten-no-Te, awakened itself in order to save Tenshin's life. Within moments after his bankai released itself, the arrancar were crushed, like insects, much to Tenshin's amazement. He then realized that this was the power he needed in order to protect the soul society from threats like the arrancar and hollow, that with this power, he could safeguard everything that he cared about. He returned to Soul Society after the war, a war-torn veteran. He had seen and caused more death than he cared to remember. It was mostly thanks to the calming reassurance of Ten-no-Te, who was always there for him, much like a guardian angel, that he was able to remain so steadfast and unshaken by what he had been through. Many of the wars veterans were never able to fully mentally recover from all that they had seen and done. And so, with the captain of squad 7 as one of the casualties, he was elected almost unanimously to take the legends place as the captain of squad 7. Since then, Soul Society has seen a period of relative peace, and Tenshin has been there to help rebuild and recover from the losses of that devastating war.

RP Sample: The rain began to fall quite suddenly, the clouds above the Seireitei able to hold the water no longer. Arthas glanced up at the sky, a drop of the now fast falling rain water hitting the center of his forehead. He drew his gaze back to the ground in front of him. He continued walking. As captain of the seventh division he had been sent to resolve the conflict which had emerged between the 69th and the 70th division. He heard the sounds of violence coming from the nearby two districts, and realized that the unrest was far greater than the Seireitei had believed. He quickly used shunpo to ascend the nearby ridge, and looked down upon a grim scene. Bodies were scattered everywhere in the 70th district, the 69th had launched a surprise attack, and bodies of women and children lined the streets alongside those of men. Anger stirred in Arthas’ heart. What was the need for this senseless conflict? What did it bring but harm to those involved, and to those who did not wish to be? He clenched his fists. He would stop this violence here, and now. No more innocents need die. Using shunpo, he arrived in the middle of the fray, where a group of 70th members were making a stand. As the two sides began to clash Arthas called out “Hadou Number 25, Searing Light” A blinding light shot forth from the captains location, and he heard screams of fear and surprise from the stunned combatants. As the blinded Rukongai citizens began to get their bearings Arthas stood in the middle of them, shaking with rage. In a voice laced with hot fury he yelled to the fighters who surrounded him “Have you learned nothing? What good does this senseless violence bring? War only brings torment, sorrow and loss to all involved. Surely you all must understand the pain of loss, and yet you only inflict more of it upon yourselves through your actions. You disgust me.” He was on the verge of crying now. “If we war amongst ourselves, we are no better than hollows. For our brutality destroys our conscience and if we allow our hatred to overstep our morality, how are we better than they? Look around you. What good has come of this, this sickening violence?” Members of both sides, who had recently regained their vision, began to look down shamefully, and shuffle their feet. Arthas sighed, and hoped his message had gotten through to them. “Members of the 69th return to your district. There’s been enough bloodshed for one day.” As the attacking force began to collect their weapons and walk out of the district Arthas looked up once again. The rain poured forth from the heavens, as if the sky itself was crying. He was glad for the rain, for it disguised his tears. It would not do for the members of the Rukongai to see a captain crying.


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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Fri Sep 03, 2010 11:09 pm

Finished.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by FallenAngel on Sat Sep 04, 2010 1:06 am

First things first. I don't have time to check this completely cause I'm bout to pass out tired, but Kido lvl 89 is the max you can have without being the kido captain. We have decided this as staff, so I am sorry, but they will need to be removed.
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Post by Arthas on Sat Sep 04, 2010 2:59 pm

Done
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by :.Daydreamer.: on Sat Sep 04, 2010 3:10 pm

'Sup, dude. App's got good length, but I've only got one of problem.


  • What's this 'Holy Energy'? How does it differ from Reiryoku?


Depending on your answer, some of your Zanpaktou abilities might have to be reworked. Also, mind breaking down your paragraphs a little more? Reading huge walls of text can be really annoying.

Edit: Also, your Zanpaktou doesn't have any powers when it's not released, so could you remove the whole Light thing, please? Plus, Light Manipulation has already been taken by another member. Sorry, dude.

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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Sun Sep 05, 2010 12:57 am

Its... A little hard to describe. Its sort of what, if you were to take it very literally, the type of power judeo-christian angels are described as wielding. From basic spirit energy, it differs in the sense that its power can be directed towards multiple applications, be it smiting, healing, or protecting. And furthermore, I feel the way the energy damages those it hits is quite different from regular Reiryoku, it does a form of burning, but its still unlike natural flames. When protecting, I suppose its function is similar to that of defensive kido. However, when healing it also behaves differently, focusing on mending wounds rather than restoring reaitsu like kido based healing does (according to Unohana at least).

Light thing removed.
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Post by Arthas on Wed Sep 08, 2010 1:02 am

Ummm.... Is it okay to bump this?
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Traca Carmesim on Wed Sep 08, 2010 11:02 am

Don't worry, you're next.
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Post by Traca Carmesim on Wed Sep 08, 2010 5:56 pm

Okay *knuckle crack* This is really hard to read and understand for me but lets have a look at this...

Release: Shikai


The Main Ability of Ten-no-Te's Shikai is the manipulation of Divine, or what Tenshin classifies as 'holy' energy.

Does your release create holy energy? Where does it originate from? How much is in existence, either from creation or if it just exists naturally, in various environments? How is it related to Reiatsu, Reishi, or Reiryoku? Frankly, its easier to just use reiatsu and not bother because depending on how your holy energy works, it could just denied and break your WHOLE Zanpakuto.


Once the shikai is activated, holy energy flows through the blade, causing it to deal increased damage to soul-based enemies. To all those it hits, every strike that connects will automatically deal the damage of a level 25 hadou spell to the creatures very essence, essentially ignoring physical defenses such as hierro.

So your sword can cut through reiryoku effectively? I wouldn't exactly place that as a Shikai ability, more Bankai appropriate, and you already have plenty of other abilities, this just seems like a catch-all to remove armor and Heirro which is highly inappropriate. This needs to be reworked, its too questionable as-is.


This energy flows directly into the enemies essence, through the wound Tenshin has opened, and therefore ignores any exterior armor and defenses the creature has.

You have to open a wound first? Doesn't it bypass reiryoku? That doesn't make much sense.


To the afflicted, it feels as if burning energy is passing through inside them, and while it is more painful than is damaging, enough succesful blows, that don't necessarily inflict enormous physical damage, can do enough damage internally to cripple an opponent.

Successful blows? So hitting them in different spots can add up overtime to increase pain or something? I thought it said 'successive' but it doesn't so I don't really know what you mean. The pain would fade between blows unless its a permanent pain and you didn't specify that so why does it cripple if it doesn't do much physical harm?


At the target location, this will create a slice of holy energy which slices in a similar motion to that Tenshin made with his zanpakutou.

Does this materialize or does it come from the blade swing, like Getsuga Tenshou? I assume that technique was what you had in mind when you made this technique, but the ways it written its like it just appears there.


This energy will slash, much like a blade of disentegrating fire,

Can we remove the 'disintegrating'? It sounds more powerful than it is.


It possesses the power of a level 45 hadou spell.

I don't know about the appropriate numbers for things like this, I'll leave it to somebody whose more Kido wise than I am.


Upon the following post, Tenshin can withdraw this energy with his offhand, and use it to form a melee weapon of pure holy energy of his choosing of any form, and it will take on all the physical properties that weapon entails, however, the weight of this weapon to Tenshin can be altered as he so chooses.

If its made of energy how it can have physical properties like a normal weapon?


After the weapon is formed it will retain its shape for the next 6 posts, and has the same basic properties as Ten-no-Te itself.

I'm already iffy about the ability about the initial ability, making as many weapons as you want and them all having this ability is definitely a no-go. Also, please limit how many weapons and what size you can make each post.


Another Special ability of Ten-no-Te is called "Purify" Tenshin will hold the sword vertically in front of him, with the flat of the blade facing himself, and call upon its energies silently, and the blade will use its restorative powers to wash Tenshin in energy, healing his wounds. It will appear as if a wave of golden energy slowly washes down him over the course of five to ten seconds and as it does, it will engulf wounds momentarily, then continue, restoring the damaged areas to the state they were in before damage was incurred. This technique will collect energy as it heals Tenshins wounds. The energy collected based on the amount of energy healed is then released, bombarding any nearby (within 20 feet) enemies. with an equivalent amount of damage in pure energy form, burning them with a wave of searing divine energy that burns away at them and buffets them backward. Conversely, this technique can also be used to heal shinigami within a similar range for the same amount of damage, however, Tenshin may only select one property of the ability to be active upon each use. This consumes 10% of his reaitsu. Cannot restore lost limbs, or heal organ damage.

Typically Zanpakuto that have healing abilities have no other significantly powerful abilities, so you can keep this and make it a Healing Zanpakuto, or remove it and work on the rest. Free healing abilities is a no though or every Zanpakuto would have them.


The third ability of Tenshin's shikai is known as "Holy Fire" This technique consumes 5% of His reaitsu, and channels a wave of bright golden flames down the length of Ten-no-Te, that surround the blade for nearly a foot and a half in every direction. These flames do not effect Tenshin himself, but greatly amplify the damage each blow is capable of dealing, as well as the range of his strikes. in addition to causing every wound created by Ten-no-Te to be completely impossible to heal. These flames amplify every successful hit by the strength of a level 15 hadou, and cause intense pain to those who contact them, making unarmed combat unwise. They last for 4 posts, and can be deactivated and reactivated at will by Tenshin during that time..

Okay, this is just really overpowered. Wounds can't be healed? No, just no. Plus you're increasing your Zanpakuto's abilities so you can do damage around a #60 Kido with your other abilities, which coupled with the fact that you can't heal inflicted damage, makes it really overpowered. Plus it lasts multiple posts and consumes 5% of your total energy, which means you could potentially have this active for 80 posts in all, 80 posts of #40 Kido hits from every swing of your released blade? Come on man...


Another defensive ability of Ten-no-Te is the technique that Tenshin has labeled 'Divine Providence'. He often will use it in situations of desperation, or to help defend an ally should he be unable to reach them personally in time. He simply says the word 'Protect' and instantly, around him and any nearby allies that he selects to protect, a swirl of Ten-no-Te's energy will appear, creating a defensive shield surrounding the target, that is roughly as strong a level 60 kido shield equivalent.

I amend my statement on your healing ability. You can have this one and your healing, or your other abilities after the appropriate edits. Defensive/Healing does not mix with Offensive, its way too broad of a range for any Zanpakuto to cover, they have specific abilities that are narrow.

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Also, the blade becomes permanently shrouded in Holy Fire while in bankai.

Uh-uh. See above.


Divine Sight: While in bankai, Tenshins eyes become completely golden with reaitsu. While this may not seem like much, these eyes are one of his bankai's most powerful effects. They are immune to being blinded through any physical means (dirt, being stabbed etc, while in bankai, he will be able to continue to see, after release falls, that eye will obviously lose vision. Furthermore, all illusions that take place through the opponents vision he is rendered completely immune to, (any illusions he was already in before bankai continue to effect him)

With this you can effectively negate the entire point of other Zanpakuto, so sorry, but this is going to have to go. Plus you have plenty of other abilities and they're already loosely linked, don't stretch it anymore.


Shikai abilities: Tenshin can continue to use his chosen generated weapon from his 'Sheath of Everflowing Light' ability, and its power increases at the same level the power of Ten-no-Te itself increases, possessing the same passive abilities. The power of Smite is increased by 15 levels, giving it the strength of a level 60 kido. The power of 'Divine Providence' Is also significantly increased, up to a level of 90, however, it can only be used on one target at a time, and he cannot use it to protect himself.

See Shikai review.


The first ability Tenshin gains in bankai...

Woah, woah, woah...you have abilities already, and theres like four more? I wanted to make sure I wasn't be unreasonable but the Captain with the most abilities is Hitsugaya and all of his are just pretty much fancy names for something he could already do with water and ice manipulation. And all of his abilities are Offensive, beyond manipulating his wings for simple defense, which further proves my point about specialized Zanpakuto. I'm not going to read over more abilities until you make sure that all these abilities match the Zanpakuto theme and aren't just dots all over the map here.

Arrancar have more abilities than any Shinigami but most of those are 'enhanced ___' so even then they don't have many true 'abilities' so Hitsu still has the most, just so you don't think I'm pulling this out of my rump.

Let me know when you have it all figured out.

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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Wed Sep 08, 2010 8:04 pm

I'm working on removing the healing/defensive techniques, but besides that, i think that, since after I remove Holy fire, and the healing and defensive abilities, I'll only have 2 techniques besides my passive effect, a few more for bankai wouldn't be that outlandish.. no? Especially since the two I get to keep are so banal. And, in terms of captain abilities, keep in mind Kyoraku gains 5 in shikai alone, and who knows how many more in bankai.

As for kido, yes, I have read the rule and have nothing over 89.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Traca Carmesim on Thu Sep 09, 2010 10:45 am

Just make sure the abilities you have match the theme of the weapon, which would seem to be a 'holy smiting' sort of theme from my perspective though I could be wrong.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Tue Sep 21, 2010 12:17 am

Alright.. Think I got everything- edited divine sight so simply physical blinding will no longer work.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Traca Carmesim on Sun Oct 03, 2010 12:43 pm


The power of Smite is increased by 25 levels, giving it the strength of a level 70 kido. Any 'holy' element kido he uses has its level raised by 5.

I'll accept a +5 on all holy kido, but not +25 to your base ability, thats rather powerful. +15 to Holy Smite so that its 60 would be fine however. Please edit accordingly.


The first ability Tenshin gains in bankai is known as Pennance. Consuming 20% of his reaitsu, he creates a volley ofholy energy, that launches from the tip of his blade onto the target. It comes in three large waves that resemble golden globes of spiraling energy each one roughly 4 feet in diameter, all of them arriving within a second of one another, and move very quickly. When the target is hit, the blasts will deal damage equivalent to a level 90 hadou spell. The light will burn away at them, hurting more than a 3rd degree burn, and often destroying the target utterly.

Way too overpowered, 20% means you would be capable of using this ability five times, which would be rather ridiculous, and I would assume that a kido of that level would consume quite a bit of energy on its own, but I don't claim to be an expert on Kido.


Another ability he gains in bankai can be his strongest or his weakest, depending on the nature of his enemy. Known as "The Judgement of the Pacifist" this technique calls upon all of the targets memories, all of the battles they have fought and all of the people they have killed, and then, over the course of two posts, forces the target to feel all of the pain that he has ever inflicted unto others. Against particularly evil or destructive foes, this can often render them completely helpless for lengthy periods of time, giving Tenshin ample opportunity to finish his foes. In order to activate this technique, Tenshin simply needs to lock eyes with his target and the effects begin. For the first post this is active, Tenshin is unable to act however.

This is impossible in the Bleach universe, though the universe relies on magical energy everything that occurs can be loosely scientifically explained, even Zanpakuto are forced to rely on scientific explainations (ex. Shinji's Shikai doesn't just randomly force your world to shift, you have to inhale a chemical released by it.) Plus this is just overpowered, has no definite time limits, and thus I cannot allow it. Please edit or remove.


His third bankai is known as 'The Storm of Lost Lights' This technique is possibly his most powerful but also his most exhausting. Costing 25% of his reaitsu, he raises his blade to the sky, and rapidly golden balls of energy begin streaming out in every direction, and start to orbit around the blade rapidly. After a few short seconds, several thousand such spheres have formed and begun spiraling the area out to a distance of five hundred yards. Each sphere is roughly the size of two fists clenched together and leaves a trail of light as it spirals, almost like a shooting star. There is very little space in between each sphere due to the sheer number, perhaps a foot or two at most. Each one, on contact with any spiritual being, will deal damage equivalent to a level 30 hadou, and will explode in a burst of light, burning away at the enemy. Therefore, no matter the power of the being, it is extremely difficult for one to stand in the storm and survive very long, as they will constantly be buffeted by dozens of such blasts, killing even strong foes very rapidly. The storms number of blasts constantly increases, so it is veritably impossible to attempt to block all of them through some method and expect that the technique would be . However, within a 10 yard radius of Tenshin, the storm ceases, therefore, enemies can escape by coming within to that short range, which is often most opponents only option.

This would require more energy than you depict, if you're using your reiatsu to generate each and every one of these spheres, imagine generating over 100 number 30 hadou and you should quickly see that such a thing is borderline insane and impossible. Especially since you're condensing it into such a shape, and thats assuming you just made 100 spheres.

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As I stated before I would like that one of the Shinigami inclined Staff members look over this since my grasp of Kido and how they function on this site are limited. Your kido need to be gone over which is something im not comfortable doing.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Sun Oct 10, 2010 11:32 pm

Most of these seem fair to me, the one point where I take issue is with the reaitsu cost of 'Storm of Lost Lights' and 'Pennance' Often times throughout the manga, captains have demonstrated the ability to use enormously powerful kido - type abilties while in bankai, the likes of which when used in actual kido numbers would surely be somehwere in the 90's for a reaitsu cost that definitley did not appear as if they had used a kido of that level.And honestly, If a captain level character had hte capacity to cast a level 90 kido, that he or she would not be drained for more than a third of their total, if that. I feel its fair to say that, due to the functionality of zanpakutous serving as a catalyst for a shinigamis power, that it, at least to a degree, redcues the amount of drain the captain level being suffers for extremely potent abilities. I feel that this technique, which's total power probably isnt that much higher than a level 95-6 hadou, for a captain's strongest attack in bankai, 1/3 of his total reaitsu is utterly reasonable. Editing the rest.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Thu Oct 14, 2010 10:39 pm

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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by FallenAngel on Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:20 pm



First question though. Why not use the coded Kido in the kido section. I worked hard on those to make it really really easy for everyone. And your custom kido need to be put in the template just to make everything tidy.


Name: Light Strike Array
Number: 67
Type: Hadou
Element: Fire/Light
Description: the user targets an area of ground, a circle with a radius of about 20 yards, and calls forth a pillar of energy from the sun to Strike down upon it, incinerating all hit by the blast. The light produced by the attack is very bright, so those who do survive are stunned by the brightness.

- There needs to be a visual circle form ahead of the pillar attacking.

Name: Searing Light
Number: 25
Type: Hadou
Element: Light
Description: a concentrated burst of bright light comes forth from the caster, destroying enemies eyesight and causing minor burns.

- What is the range of this? Is it a blast, or just an intensely bright flash. It also seems to be Overpowered for a 25.

Name: Bind Flesh
Number: 79
Type: Healing
Description: the caster can use this upon himself or allies. This technique takes time to work, during which the caster must remain completely still, making it difficult to use in combat. Upon casting, the targets wounds will rapidly begin to repair themselves, and bind together. Time taken to heal depends on the severity of the wounds. (light wounds take approximately 1 whole post severe ones up to 4)

- No healing Kido

Name: Prison of Fire
Number: 70
Type: Bakudou
Element: Fire
Description: the target is trapped from six sides by dense walls of fire, which burn upon contact.

- This can be broken by a powerful strike of energy.

Overall, you have quite a few customs, and you did well to only have to make these edits.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Mon Oct 18, 2010 6:52 pm

I had already had this list established on another character and simply copied it on to this one, which is why it isn't in the format you have. As far as I can tell your template looks exactly the same as the old one, but if you really need me to put everything in bold, I can do so. The places where I didn't list incantations are kido where the increase from doing so would not be significant enough for the kido's level to matter.

In regard to Searing light, it is an intensely bright flash, but it is more than powerful enough to blind an opponent for several posts.. Its got a range of about 50 yards around him for it to be effective, if they are further than that it doesnt work.. It would be similar in effect to getting sprayed with a can of spiritual mace. I don't feel thats overpowered for a 25, as a 33 can be used to destroy buildings with ease by a captain, but if you feel it is I'll edit.

Edited the rest.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by FallenAngel on Mon Oct 18, 2010 8:55 pm

For the light one, lower it to one post of blindness and that will be good.

As for the rest of the stuff. Hage has been checking the app, so whenever he says its good, then its good.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Traca Carmesim on Mon Oct 18, 2010 9:24 pm

All I need is a verification that the Zanpakuto abilities kido numbers are appropriate.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by FallenAngel on Mon Oct 18, 2010 9:52 pm

Attacks that have names like smite and such should go under techniques as well, but I see no problems with the numbers.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Tue Oct 19, 2010 6:45 pm

Edited the abilities into the techniques section, and edited the kido in question.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by Arthas on Sun Oct 24, 2010 6:14 pm

Bump.
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Re: Tenshin Kaminaka, Squad 7 Captain

Post by FallenAngel on Thu Oct 28, 2010 4:50 pm

Tis approved then.
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