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The special technique has already been provisionally approved by Ieyasu Zyul

Basic Information

Name: Teodor

Age: Around 8000 years old. Exact figures are not known

Gender: Male

Rank: Vaste Lorde

Looks:

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Teodor like many other Vaste Lorde is far smaller then most his kin. He stands a little over 6ft tall and is clearly humanoid in shape if nothing else. His pitch black body is Hidden under some stark gloves and robes and a cloak as dark as night. He could very well be mistaken for a human with a morbid dress sense if it were not for the Holo Mask in place of a face. Enshrouded in darkness the Hollow Mask stands out stark in white and red with an ornate derocative motive not normally seen on a hollow mask running down the centre. Like all Hollows he has a hole, in his case nearly half a foot wide centering on his left chest, though it is commonly hidden from view behind clothes and robes. His gives off an air of oppression and primevil hunger. It is clear both from his size and countanance that he is hollow of some strength, ancient and hungry for souls. He carries no visible weapons on him but as a Hollow such things are of questionable value. When he moves he seems almost to float as though he isnt walking at all and makes little to no sound. He will always revert to this form in battle or when treversing the Hueco Mundo

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Close up of his Mask

Mortal Appearance:

Like all Vasto Lorde Teodor may take on human guise. His guise is not set and can be changed to suit his needs but he generally uses one of a man in his 30's in a old fashion suit. Teodor rarely enters the human world and bares little head to fashions so has yet to take on a more modern form. Whatever shape he takes he nearly always wears dark sun glasses since his eyes are pitch black with no pupils or eyelids, the same as in his Hollow form. They are the only real hint of his true nature. Teodor tires of this form easily and considers beneath him to have to assume it and rarely does

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Teodor's default mortal appearance

Hollow Ability Information

Name: Reiatsu Body

Description: A most powerful unique technique, acquired upon rising to the highest rank of Menos, the Vaste Lorde. Such techniques are a sign of ones elevation and superiority above ones kin. Not only does it allow him to easily store considerable spiritual energy that he possess but because his form is made up of Reiatsu he do things with it many other hollows can only dream of. He can manipulate both the shape and nature of it to his needs

Advantages:

He can partially change his shape. He cannot change shape entirely and must remain vaguely humanoid or develop wings but he can stretch an arm, enlarge or shrink parts of himself as well as change the shape of a limb in that of axe or a sword or a whip or cause spikes to come out of his body.
He can change the nature of his body (or parts of it) hardening the skin to a strong metalike consistency (akin to Hierro) for both defensive and offensive puropses or make it soft, jelly like or even phase it out all together causing attacks to pass straight through it.
Since the body is made of spiritual energy any damage sustained by it has no effect on Teodor well being however those parts that are damage will not be as effective till they regenerate
Attacks that do land can be regenerated relatively quickly, healing the damage as the Reiatsu reforms. This requires only a small amount of spiritual energy to perform and happens innately.
At the expense of a large amount of Spiritual energy he can cause his form and strength to grow many times larger till he is the size of a multi-story building, though this is not something often does. He can similarly fortify the Reiatsu to buff his standard speed for short periods though once again is draining

Weakness:

The above abilities combine to make Teodor seem to many a horrific proposition to fight. His body seems all but undefeatable initially but its not with out cost. Teodor has a well hidden fatal flaw. The act of attaining this technique caused a large hair line fracture to develop on his mask that he can not seem to heal leaving him with fatal weak point. A few strong attacks at this point and the mask is likely to shatter and Teodor with it. He has hidden the crack behind an elaborate strip of armour hoping to better reinforce it but still fears any damage to the mask. Furthermore while he can warp his body his mask will never change nor can it be phased out. Teodor must carefully consider his approach and how to use his powerful and nigh unharmable body to protect his vulnerable mask. There is nothing to be gained by phasing out his body to avoid a Cero attack only for his mask to be caught in the blast.

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Special Cero:

Name: Hollow Cabeza Cero (Hollow’s Head Cero)
Description: Formed in a similar way to Cero, though it takes slightly longer this technique forms a larger ball of swirling black spiritual energy held in the up turned palm of his hand. It is fair but more powerful then the regular version though not as strong as certains others such as Gran Rey Cero. However it does have a very unique aspect. After forming it a hollows mask will appear on it surface as Teodor implants an aspect of one of the myriad of souls he has consumed over the millenia into it give it a paraody of life. This semi intelligent Cero can do nothing but it can guide the attack making it far more accurate and harder to avoid.

Hollow Lord

Teodor is one a few beings who stand as the nearest thing Hollows have to a leader. To most of his kind Teodor is a terrifying Hollow of unsumountable power who few dare to question. It is rumoured he has many lesser Hollows in thrall, willing do meet his every command and is capable of raising a army of them should the need come about. Teodor is well known to dominate and control his servants. He is one of the old power players who existence pre dates the coming of the arrancar and the Espada, so far their rise to power has not impact on his own territory but who knows what the future may hold

Techniques Infomation
Cero and Special Ability Techs

Name: Soul-Body Seperation
Description: This technique allows a hollow to forcibly extract a living spirit from his/her body. This can only be done on either those who present no threat (i.e civiliains) or people who are otherwise incapicitated and so rarely has an application in battle

Name: Reiatsu Sustantivo (Reiatsu Drain)
Description: This technique requires that the victim by bound or otherwise held still in close proximity where upon Teodor will open it black gaping mouth and suck his opponents Reiatsu right out of them. Their Reiatsu will appear to flow out there on mouth and into his own. While in this state it is not possible for the victim to use mouth based attacks. Each post Teodor will drain a ¼ of the Reiatsu till the fourth post were he literally suck their soul out consuming leaving only a lifeless body in his wake

Name: Cien Naciente Miembro (100 Rising Limbs)
Description: Teodor must be standing on the ground and cannot move while performing this technique. While distracting his opponent with odd arm movements he will change the form of his body sending a torrent of branching off limbs under the ground. After a moments they will rise up around the intened victim either as hands or weapons intending to slow him down, hurt him and if possible capture him

Name: Explosivo Reforma (Explosive Reformation)
Description: This technique is emergency escape technique that is only effective once for each opponent who sees it. If he feels things are going badly and he needs a way out he will gather reiatsu inside his body and detonate it causing his body to quite literally explode all over the places and send his mask flying obscured in the mayhem. This usually timed to occur just as a attack is due to hit to make it look as though his opponent has cause it. While they wonder if they have won and puzzle about what happen Teodor’s scattered body will sink into the ground and head towards his mask where it will reform once more out of sight. This is the great the first time around but not the second time around since they will know what has happen and instantly seek the now highly vulnerable Mask.

Name: Mirar Fujamente Hollow (Stare of the Hollow)
Description: Teodor turns his baleful gaze on his opponent in attempt to unnerve them. This will not effect anyone with the same or high pts count. The target will come slighty tense and more prone to mistakes. It also can be used as way of warning others not to mess with him if he so chooses.

Name: Levitacion (Levitation)
Description: Teodor can make his body turn wraithlike allowing him to levitate upto 30ft into the air. It doesn’t not affect his other abilities or make him move any faster in this form and it requires a small but continuous amount of reiatsu to maintain.

Name: Negro Cabo (Black Strands)
Description: Teodor extends his arm out and release an arc of black lightning made of condensed spiritual energy that cause severe burns and disorientates the victim for the following 2 posts. While the arc is quite wide making it hard to avoid, it does have a short range (6m) and is only moderately damaging (more so then Bala but less so the Cero).

Name: Hollow Vista (Hollow Sight)
Description: A ability possessed by high level Hollows only. Hollow sight allows Teoder to see behind the faces of other disguised Hollows and Arrancar to see what the mask really looks like. This does not tell the user their abilities only the mask of the hollow in question and can help in working out their identity

Name: Bala Sombra (Shadow Bullets)
Description: This technique that hardens a Hollow’s spiritual and releases it from their hand like a powerful bullet, in Teodor’s case it appears a black balls which normally come from out stretched fingers. This technique is not as powerful as a Cero, but is about 20 times faster.

Name: Susurro Noche (Whispers in the Night)
Description: Gained after absorbing Narinya Soul, Teodor whispers in a crude archaic tongue of hollow’s designed to induce the victim into thinking Teodor, far from a dark powerful hollow, is the person they most one to see, from a relative to comrade in arms. They will not be able to tell the difference between by any form of sense. This hypnotic effect ends as soon as the victim incurs any harm or when Teodor acts out of character and they realise he isn’t whom he pretends. This does not work when there is more then one person present and needs to be initiated prior to the opponent seeing Teodor or else they will see the change. The best protection against is not to face Teodor alone or let him out of sight

Name: (Signo Corrupcion) Mark of Corruption
Description: A mark which Teodor can bestow upon his followers that is in the shape of his own mask. The recipient must be willing for it to be successful. Teodor places his hand where the mark is to be laid and pushes one of his countless souls that make up his in form into the recipient. From then the mark bearer gains a small boost of reiatsu equivalent to one Cero that recharges over time from which to tap. However the technique might by better name Mark of Control since Teodor retains a certain amount of control over the energy within. Should a hollow with the mark lose his favour he can activate creating a cero where the mask was normally destroying or fatal wounding the hollow in question. Teodor often uses it as a secret means of control over his own minions

Name: Cero
Description: A ball of black ominous spirit energy gathers into Teodor’s palm which he stretches in the direction of his opponent sending it hurtling at them. Teodors considerable spiritual power lends to this technique giving a wide blast area and considerable strength

Name: Garganta
Description: It tears open the dimensional fabric separating the worlds, revealing a tunnel of whirling, torrential energy that must be focused and solidified to create a discernible pathway. Teodor like all Hollows uses this to travel to and from Hueco Mondo

Name: Olfato (Sense)
Description: Teodor can smell and even taste Reiatsu from great distances, even across worlds and follow the spiritual energy to its source should he wish. Teodor needs to pause a moment to do this effectively but once he is aware of a build up of spiritual energy he can sense it unencumbered. This is similar to the arrancar and Shinigami abilities to sense spiritual energy.

Stats
(Depending on your rank, please distribute the amount of stats that you receive within the four options)

Strength:
20

Speed: 20

Accuracy: 20

Stamina: 20

History and RP Sample


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History: Teodor was once, many millennia ago, a human though he tries not to think back to this wretched period of his existence. He was once a primitive hunter gather with a wife and two healthy children though he can not recall their names anymore and does not care too. They were part of a life long abandoned. Still back then they were pivotal in shaping his current form. He had been out hunting wild boar, a dangerous task not to be taken lightly when the screaming began. It was coming from their camp he and 5 other families had called home for the spring months only to find raiders and smoke. He recalled owning a flint axe to which he remembered a vague sense of pride in owning and rushed to their aid. Unfortunately these invaders were all armed with sharp spears and something he had never seen before odd bent sticks that fire shafts of wood and stone. These bows, though he was unaware of their nature till later, took him unaware and a shot in calf laid him low as the raiders took off with his family and few possessions. The pain was immense and the wound soon become infected and festering yet in spite of this he persued them partly because didn’t know what else to do and mainly because he was angry and sort revenge, a mistake or good fortune depending hoe you see it that lead to his present form. The raiders where part of a new migration of a more advanced tribe who were subduing the locals. Injured as he was he was no threat and was soon enough taken hostage too. It turns out these people believed in something the called god and believed he would appease him and grant a god harvest. Teodor did not understand this at the time all he remembered was the unbelievable pain as he was thrown into the fire pit to burn to death his soul apparently to be sate their angry good. In fact his soul arose and felt a pull which must have been the soul society or it is least its ancient comparator but Teodor ignored it. He was confused, angry, restless and most all vengeful. His spirit wondered among them seeking ways to get its revenge to make them burn too, to take everything they held dear from them. Nothing worked, so tried he harder and become more agitated, unstable and hateful. It was then a hole began to form, he did not understand why or how and fear in his ignorance he was fading away, however as the hole grew he started to change. He found he could begin to affect the mortal world even interact occasionally with. Finally the Hollow formed and he took on a new and most terrible visage. Large and hungry he looked upon the tribe before him, grinned and started his predations. Soon enough they were sacrificing a good deal more people to evade this evil spirit that now haunted them but it was too no avail, one by one Teodor consumed their souls coming more powerful with each one. He learnt a little of the different worlds but at this stage thought he was unique. Hollows were still very uncommon and rare during this period and Teodor went like this for many decades before meeting another.

The meeting was a memorable one, the other Calisok was smaller then he and had only recently become one. While he considered attacking him, his hunger almost getting the better of him the years of isolation had also left him eager for company. He invited him to join him on his hunts into the mortal realm. It turned out that while of a similar mindset he was not cunning or subtle enough for the hunt and he began to attract unwanted attention. He was the reason behind Teodor’s first encounter with the Shingami though they were a very different organisation back them, far smaller and less well organised. Teodor was almost purified several times after Calisok’s foolish stumbling and more importantly began to get increasingly hungry as the Shinigami’s hounding limited his hunting. Worse to his mind was during this period his hollow continued to expand and the souls of humans failed to sate him properly. After one particularly fruitless night thanks to ill timed by Calisok strike he turned on him and did something he did not realise was possible he consumed his soul. Teodor was among the first Hollows to cannibalise his own and if that experience told him anything was that he liked it. Hollows were much more satisfying to his mind and he all but left humans to their on devices as he went in search of his own kind to consume. He soon learnt he was not the only one even despite the still relatively small number of Hollows in existence and soon a number were trying to devour one another. Steadily this rose to a point where Teodor became part of an entirely new form that of a Gillian, though this Gillian form was considerably smaller then those today reflective of the then smaller population. For many years he was but part of a larger being, however even within its new form a struggle for supremacy raged. Finally Teodor was triumphant suppressing the other Hollows minds and began to exert his will over the mass. As his dominance spread the other hollows died off the bodies falling away from the mass, their souls consume by Teodor. Eventually only Teodor was left a radically different being. Half a millennia had passed since he had become a Hollow and he had now achieved what few others dreamed that of the rank of Adjuchas. During this time the Adjuchas were considered by the Shinigami the senior form of Hollow. No Vaste Lorde had yet to be accounted for or had presented it self. Teodor’s personality changed significantly at this point, a change that would have a great impact on the rest of his life. Before this point he was only driven by hunger and very basic emotions but now his mind developed other aspects and deeper thoughts came to the surface. His personnality that exists today owes much to this formative period.

While hungry as ever he became more patient and careful, an ambush predator that became skilled at luring lower level hollows and occasionally his own level to there doom. He also developed and appreciation for things beyond simple killing such as words, language and history and how they could be used to further his own power. It was a few centuries in such form before he met the second hollow that would impact upon his life, Narinya, a lithe female Hollow who lure others to the death using a sirens a song. On first encounter they tried to consume each other but after a titanic struggle that lasted several hours none was any closer to it. They developed a bond of mutual respect and for the second time in his life Teodor did not hunt alone. For half a millennium Teodor and Narinya hunted together bringing down countless hollows and even Shinigami. There names were feared throughout the soul society and they began to become the targets of ever many more attacks. Soon they rose above most of their fellow Adjuchas in strength though as the strength rose a distance began to form between them, one of tension and rivalry. As they grew in power it came abundantly obvious that they were one anothers main threats. The mutual co-operation began to rot under paranoia and suspicion. It was shortly after this they become aware of a new level that only a one had ever arisen to so far, that of Vaste Lorde. They learned the dark rituals required and more importantly the requirement to slay someone else seeking elevation. It was perhaps inevitable that that two would turn on one another in a fight that would last well over 3 days. In end Narinya fell with Teodor’s blades cutting her almost in two however in the final moment she lashed out with her claws and nearly shattered his mask leaving a large hairline crack down the centre. As he absorbed her twisted soul he felt a change, something came upon him and the world blurred into darkness. When the world faded back into view he had changed into his current form. However his mask had not changed, it remained as it had been before hand, crack and all. He tried to regenerate it but had no luck. He realized that as it was he was perhaps weaker then he had been previously and considered he had been cursed. As time past however and he began to understand his own powers he came to accept that it was a sacrifice for a greater strength, his new body was to his mind … Flawless. He fashioned a powerful ornate guard to hide and protect the crack from those who might exploit it. This was how Teodor became one of the first of the Vaste Lorde and among the most powerful of his kind.

The true first was a Hollow called Isildor who had the power to dominate his kin and was the first hollow to gather enough momentum to actually attack the soul society in force. Teodor and Isildor, like all Vaste Lorde, avoided each other like the plague usually. Like all those with power there was always the fear of losing it and to a Vaste Lorde this fear could only realistically come about from an elite Shinigami assassination unit or another Vaste Lorde. The result was that they also suspected on another of secretly planning to consume them and tended to keep to themselves. Occasionally however they would meet for a great purpose, usually because an opportunity had presented itself that no one of them was powerful enough to exploit. Such an opportunity occurred as his 5th millennium of existence approached. The Shinigami had over stretched themselves and Isildor approached Teodor and in a rare meeting to convince him to attack the soul society. He agreed and between them they drove 10,000’s of the lesser kin against the Shinigami pushing them almost to brink. However the Shinigami held and on the fourth day the assault collapsed. It had become apparent that those behind the assault had a falling out, a particularly large one given the huge reiatsu residues found in its aftermath. Teodor never explained why it happened, though he hints that Isildor had done something foolish whatever it was the two fought one another. In end Teodor emerged all the more powerful, one vast soul richer while Isildor’s mask flew broken and lifeless on the ground.

Teodor’s latest acquisition made him powerful then ever and his hunger was now a truly horrific thing to behold and he something constantly sought to sate. For over 3 millennia since he has prowled both the mortal and spiritual realms in search of souls. Though her preferring by far Hueco Mundo to the other alternatives. The crimes laid at his feet are so numerous and prolific that Teodor has risen to become among the most famous of his kind and one of the few known Vaste Lorde. His name is well known to the Shinigami and he is even mentioned as part of the core teaching to highlight the danger many Shinigami face. Other then his name and crimes however very little is known about this most infamous of Hollows. Accounts of his deeds give no indication of his abilities, simply an idea of his considerable power. It is claimed by some researchers into Hollow society that Teodor has been involved in no less then four separate assaults on the soul society and rumored to have great influence over his own kind. Only two facts are known in relation to him. One that he somehow he has acquired an honoree name among his kind, a title of sorts though its origins are unknown. They call him ‘Corazon del Oscuridad’ which literally means Heart of the Darkness, the reasoning is unknown but the possession of such a name which only makes him seem more alien and terrifying gives some indication to his power. The second is actually from Quincy archives captured during the Qunicy/Shinigami war according to ancient historical accounts the one they called Teodor was struck by 100 spiritual arrows only to remain unharmed. How this is possible remains a mystery and raises questions to the true powers of the Vaste Lorde.

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RP Sample: Post done last week from Naruto Ingoo where I am co-leader of the Akat and a Mod. Part of a questioning of a apprentice

"Test, no, that is yet to come. This is both less and far more. It's is question whether we can depend on you? Whether you are truly prepared for what is to come? Up there (indicating the head with a nod) where it counts, physical strength as all well and good but if you are afraid to use it then it is meaningless. So many are weak and foolish who are chained by their ideals, imprisoned by their own preconceptions”

Looking down properly at him he continued maintain his low and serious tone:

“You too are still chained but you have a chance to be truly free and with this freedom attain true power. That you find every day is hell is sign enough that you do not understand or embrace what we are. Hell, that’s what you call your trifling ordeals is it. You do not know the meaning of the word. The training you have undergone might seem hard compared to those practised by those feeble Nin back in Konoha but hell is something much more. Soon you will know will have an opportunity first hand of what hell looks like”

He ended the last sentence with harrowing smile before staring off into the distance and continuing:

It is good that you acknowledge your weakness for recognition is the first step to conquering it. Given your former mistress is no longer her to educate it I have decided to aid you myself. Do not think this out of some misconceived ideal of kindness or somehow I have come to attached to you, such emotions have no sway me and if you take my advice should not hold you either. By making you strong I make the Akatsuki strong and with a strong Akatsuki supporting me I can more easily achieve my goals. To unleash your full potential you must do things. Neither will come easily though you will know when you have met them”

“The first is both the hardest and the simplest. Easy to do as long but only if ones resolve is strong you must strip away your preconceptions that limit you. It’s what makes the loyalist Nin so weak, bound by laws and morals they must always work within. These sets of moral perimeters, these paltry codes invented by old feckless men to weak to enforce them bind and constrain them. The fact you have joined us and shown a willingness to kill among other things is a sign you have began the progress but you are not yet there. Even now you display how your upbringing binds you, holds you back. You get affronted that I spoke ill of Sayori trapped by the idea one must be respectful to the dead (As he said so he picked up a nearby skull, red with blood in one of his large brutish hands and began to throw it and catch one handed). Whole told you that was required? Yes your peers and so called social betters? Tell me do they mean anything to you now? So why pray do you continue to follow society’s foolish lead. Sayori’s death was a lost to the organisation but do you think I feel obligated be restricting customs to mourn or respect her dead rotting corpse? (As he said the last he caught the skull and crushed it reducing it to 100 shards as though it were nothing) Such morality is for the weak. When you see civilians as I do, nothing more then walking meatbags whose sole role is to provide for you what you wish, it will astonishing how much more useful they become. If you were to strip away societies petty limitations and you too can become limitless”

He turned away from the apprentice to look up almost in prayer to an unknown force

“The latter might seem odd given it does not sit will with the other, the need to devote yourself to cause but as I will know explain a being without purpose is fundamentally flawed. Do you understand what devotion is boy?

He paused as if expecting an answer but interrupted before he could speak

“Devotion is far more then the mere acceptance of ones lot but the will to see it through. Currently you are drifting; you may be a relatively loyal apprentice but you uncertain of your place, of the Akatsuki and your future in it. Half the reason you stay with us is you have no other place to go. I truly devoted apprentice would embrace their training, not complain about its difficulty. This uncertainty must end, it is not enough to simply follow meekly like a sheep, and one must strive with all ones strength. Even those limited village dwellers understand this much There is in saying in Yukigakure that “While we stand, the mountain stand’s”, I believe your people have one too “The Will of Fire”. It is these that drive their Nin to do all in within their limited power. You must find one too. We leave soon to the country of my birth. There you will see the best and worst of what the Akatsuki has to offer. You will be tested in ways you can not even imagine and see if you have the power to overcome your shortcomings. Should you do this you might truly be worthy of the full membership. For time being you will report to me. Do not mistake this for my accepting as an apprentice. I have another in mind for this task”

He let it hang in the air. To be honest no one would think Jiro would ever take an apprentice, he was just was not the type. He let the be ponder the statement a bit longer before finishing off

“Surprised, don’t be. I will do as I must and an apprentice is called for. You may even be of some use in his instruction. And Zakuza, do not think I need some trinket to know of your success I can smell the blood still upon you. You have done well in this respect and I believe you may soon be ready for more rigorous training. First I have a gift for you (he threw something small and shining to Z who catched it instinctively, which on closer inspection proved to be a akatsuki ring), I would suggest you guard it better then its last owner, you will find several cloaks within your quarters. There is a reason you will not serve as my apprentice or indeed any others, your apprenticeship is at an end. You will move on to great things now. Do not think you earned full membership quite yet, our numbers as you know include Nin of the highest calibre whose skills are match for kages, you have quite away still to come if before you wield the power of one. Now I have told all I intend but I sense you have questions still. You my ask, though do not presume that I will answer them”

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Post by Hizoruki Metsuki Sun Jun 07, 2009 2:00 pm

I don't know whether to approve or not. Its just I do not know if the RP Sample must involve your character or not.
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Post by Guest Sun Jun 07, 2009 2:07 pm

1) Dominar Voluntad is GM. You should never have the ability to literally control someone elses character. So, you need to remove this.

Other then this, I find this application to be very impressive. Once you remove Dominar Voluntad, i'll take a second look.

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Right removed as requested

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Post by Guest Sun Jun 07, 2009 2:11 pm

Well, I am not the mod whom can officially approve this, since Hizoruki is now responsible for the rest. But, since you had given us the source of where you had made this RP-Sample originally, I'd say it should be approved.

Again, i'll leave the rest to Hizo! Very Happy

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